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My English essay assignment (The wirting requirement is in the picture😊 and thanks for your help) Being a woman is better With society developing, men and women are treated equally more than before. But social discriminations which men suffer more from still exist, so being a woman is better than being a man in today’s society. First, men were educated to be stoic and independent, macho and athletic, powerful and dominant, and phobic of anything close to feminine when they are little boys. Due to the pressure to be constantly strong, they learn to wall-off feelings which makes them lose the opportunity to develop their emotional intelligence. However, women can express their feelings openly so that they can master the emotion better. And in the workplace, women are largely protected from workplace fatalities and men are not. Although people use the “Glass ceiling” to describe the women has invisible obstacles to get promoted to higher positions within a company. But far more men than women dying on the job. Because men need to do very dangerous jobs that will lead to death. People’s it’s men’s duty to work in crappy jobs like mining or operating oil rigs. Finally, people think that one element to define maleness is men’s bank accounts. Even today, when women have more chance to get jobs and their income is increasing, men are still expected to be as wealthy as it possible, to provide for their family at the bare minimum while women are not required to be. And if they failed, they will be look down on others. So, they are under the greater economic pressure than women. All is mentioned above, in today’s society, men face more harmful pressure from the work place, social discrimination, and they were told to hide their feelings and be independent. On the contrary, women can express their feelings freely, have more safe jobs and even less economic pressure. So, it’ better to be a woman obviously.

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My English essay assignment (The wirting requirement is in the picture😊 and thanks for your help)

Being a woman is better
With society developing, men and women are treated equally more than before. But social discriminations which men suffer more from still exist, so being a woman is better than being a man in today’s society.
First, men were educated to be stoic and independent, macho and athletic, powerful and dominant, and phobic of anything close to feminine when they are little boys. Due to the pressure to be constantly strong, they learn to wall-off feelings which makes them lose the opportunity to develop their emotional intelligence. However, women can express their feelings openly so that they can master the emotion(s)* better.
And in the workplace, women are largely protected from workplace fatalities and men are not. Although people use the “Glass ceiling” to describe the how women has have invisible obstacles to get promoted to higher positions within a company. But far more men than women dying die on the job. Because men need to do very dangerous jobs that will lead to death. People’s it’s men’s duty to work in crappy jobs like mining or operating oil rigs.
Finally, people think that one element to define maleness is men’s bank accounts. Even today, when women have more chances to get jobs and their income is increasing, men are still expected to be as wealthy as it possible, to provide for their family at the bare minimum while women are not required to be. And if they failed, they will be looked down on others. So, they are under the greater economic pressure than women.
All is mentioned As detailed** above, in today’s society, men face more harmful pressure from the work place, social discrimination, and they were are told to hide their feelings and be independent. On the contrary other hand***, women can express their feelings freely, have more safe jobs and even less economic pressure. So, it’s better to be a woman obviously.

* "Emotions" = specific feelings, for example happy, then sad, then lonely. "Emotion" = feelings in general.
** "As detailed", "As outlined", "As explained", "As argued"...
*** "On the contrary" is correct - however, "on the other hand" is more natural-sounding English.

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