添削： I bought a second monitor for my PC using my Amazon points. I did this because I wanted to improve my work efficiency, as well as better edit pictures I've taken in the past. The monitor is an ultra-wide color monitor that can express more colors than other similar monitors. I hope to use it to display my edited pictures as soon as possible. Nice job! My only comment is that some parts don't make sense. For example, when you say: "also I start to edit the pictures I have taken so far" it doesn't make sense, because you could already do this when you had one monitor. So you have to relate it to how having a second monitor can improve your ability, not add new ones.