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Dear volunteer,
I’m LiMing, a staff from Aiding Rural Primary School, it’s of great pleasure to answer your questions.
As you see, we have the promotion of educational equality. During the holidays, members of this project go to the poorest area, devoting to teach the local pupils without any charge.
Before taking off, we test the candidates and choose some of them as formal members, who will go through severe trains. All in all, this project is a good opportunity to gain unique experience. If you have the intense, log in our website and sign up.
LiMing
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A piece of exam-oriented composition🤪 (topic in the picture)
Dear vVolunteer,
I’m LiMing, a staff member from the Aiding Rural Primary School project. , i It’s of great pleasure to answer your questions.
As you see, we have the promotion of are promoting educational equality. During the holidays, members of this project go to the poorest areas, devoting to teach and are devoted to teaching the local pupils without any charge.
Before taking off acceptance, we test the candidates and choose some of them as formal members, who will go through severe trains intense training. All in all, this project is a good opportunity to gain unique experience. If you have the intense interest, log in our website and sign up.
LiMing
Hi Rhea (Or Li Ming!)
I have tried to keep your vocabulary, and leave your sentence structure, as much as possible.
I think Li Ming should have a space in the name - just like on the instruction sheet.
Volunteer - capital V, as this is replacing the name. No one would mark you wrong for a lower case v, but it looks better with the capital V.
"acceptance" Horrible word if you don't know it, but by using it I didn't need to adjust the sentence.
OR Before joining our project, we test the candidates ...
One more example using acceptance - this is the common way the word is used. The newly elected president gave an inspiring acceptance speech.
Severe - negative connotations. Like severe illness. Intense is much more neutral, even a positive word. "I enjoyed the movie, the ending was very intense."
Interest - I think is the word you want. Intensity could be an option - but sounds like you want the volunteers to bounce off the walls!
If you have any questions, please ask.
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