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JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON November 15th I would like someone to correct my diary (or to tell me the natural way of saying some things below. But I would be happy even if you JUST CORRECT my entry). Here, I might write in spoken English, possibly, because I want to improve not just my writing skills, but also the skill of spoken English. Could do that for me, please? JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON November 15th I did it! The brand-new series of Pokemon game has been released out into the world. Yes I am one of those who have waited for the long time until now. I had serious problem until I got that game however. On the date when it would be released, I was working so hard at my office and I didn't have time to buy sadly. So I had decided to buy that Pokemon game on the following date. Having said that, I could't play well yesterday, this date is after the date when the game was released, because I have to go fitness. Of course I was totally looking forward to play this game, but keeping in shape is big-time important thing for me as much as you have breakfast every morning. Then, finally, I turned on Nintendo Switch, and I heard the familiar old music of Pokemon. Oh my god..I might be impressed with this music, it really remember me of my childhood. I used to play Pokemon series after my school. I used to talk about Pokemon with my friends everyday. Yes, my childhood is consisted of Pokemon, definitely.

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JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON November 15th

I would like someone to correct my diary (or to tell me the natural way of saying some things below. But I would be happy even if you JUST CORRECT my entry). Here, I might write in spoken English, possibly, because I want to improve not just my writing skills, but also my the skill inof spoken English. Could do that for me, please?

JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON November 15th

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The brand-new version of the Pokemon game has been released into the world. Yes, I am one of those who have waited for this moment for a long time. I had serious problems until I got that game, however. On the date that it was released, I was working so hard at my office that I didn't have time to buy it, sadly. So I decided to buy it on the following day. Having said that, I couldn't play well yesterday, meaning the day after the day the game was released, becauseI had to go work out. Of course I was totally looking forward to playing this game, but keeping in shape is a big-time thing for me, as important as having breakfast every morning. Then, finally, I turned on Nintendo Switch, and I heard the familiar old music of Pokemon. Oh my God...I was impressed by the music. It really reminded me of my childhood. I used to play Pokemon after school. I used to talk about Pokemon with my friends everyday. Yes, my childhood definitely consisted largely of Pokemon.
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I did it! The new Pokemon game has been released, and I have waited for so long for this moment. I had a serious problem getting the game, though, as on the release date as I was working at the office and I didn't have time to buy it. I decided to buy the game the following day, but I couldn't play it yesterday (the date I bought the game) because I had to go to the gym. Of course, I was totally looking forward to playing the game, but keeping in shape is equally important, just like eating breakfast every morning. Then, after the gym, I finally turned on the Switch and heard the nostalgic music. I used to play Pokemon every day after school and talk about it with my friends. My childhood definitely consisted of Pokemon. I hope this helps!! If you need any further help, just ask :)

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