好吧...我被暗暗的群攻....
蒂姆波顿——《牡蛎男孩忧郁之死》 翻译小试
被喷试译太过华丽 T^T 脱离原文简单忧郁之风
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Staring Girl
I once knew a girl
Who would just stand there and stare.
At anyone or anything,
she seemed not to care.
She’d stare at the ground,
She’d stare at the sky.
She’d stare at you for hours,
and you’d never know why,
But after wining the local staring contest,
she finally gave her eyes
a well-deserved rest
放空的少女
我曾经认识一个少女
她总是一动不动的站着
眼睛一眨不眨的望着
没有人知道她在望着谁或是什么
因为她看上去对任何事情都漠不关心
她时而望向天空
时而望向大地
天哪
她甚至能目不转睛的望着你几个钟头
你都不明所以
后来
我听说她赢得了小镇“放空大赛”第一名
终于
作为奖励
她给眼睛放了个长长的假
The Boy with Nails in his Eyes
The Boy with Nails in his Eyes
put up his aluminium tree.
It looked pretty strange
Because he couldn’t really see.
钉子眼的小男孩
小男孩在旁若无人的搭建着自己的小铝树
他专心的甚至都没意识到他的眼珠是两个铝钉子
这听上去太奇怪了
人们不住地好奇
他是怎么看东西的呢
(my favourite one)
The Girl with Many Eyes
One day in the park
I had quite a surprise
I met a girl
who had many eyes.
She was really quite pretty
(and also quite shocking!)
and I noticed she had a mouth
so we ended up talking
We talked about flowers
and her poetry classes
and the problems she’d have
if she ever wore glasses.
It’s great to know a girl
who has so many eyes,
but you really get wet
when she breaks down and cries.
十只眼的小女孩
有次,我在奇幻公园散步
发生了一件着实让人惊讶的事
我遇见了一个小女孩
她长了许多只眼睛
可是她漂亮极了
(虽然她的美貌特异,让人吃惊)
我看到了她眼睛下的粉红小嘴
于是便开始同她聊了起来
我们聊到这满园的绚丽之花
哦 还有她所在的小诗歌班
甚至是大家都好奇的
万一她眼神不好的话该怎么办呢
我不得不承认
了解一个女孩是件多么棒的事
特别是有着这么多只眼睛的奇妙姑娘
但是,我的朋友
你要明白
当她脆弱到不堪一击的哭泣起来
你会感受到泪水的冰冷而为此心寒彻骨
Search from various English teachers...
Corrections · 4
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dude 谢谢~
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谢谢Echo
许多人都说单看翻译不错 不过脱离原文风格 T^T
很多人都绝句律句都用上了....为了追求信达雅.....
至少你的翻译不会比那些还不自然 ^ _ ^
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Wow. This is interesting. Keep it up. I enjoy reading your translations.
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我觉得你翻译得不错哎。如果是我来翻的话,可能言辞会比较不自然啊...
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