(Description about my college course. ) How could I write it better ?
The professional of Energy Efficiency and Energy Management efficiently manage the economy issues, takes decisions about production, distribution, consumption and energy saving for the companies and institutions. The appropriate course that prepare the student for the professional manager combining the technical knowledge about energy systems to the energy market, acting business strategy, project management, finance and the leadership challenges. This professional mange action for the rational energy consumption and correctly identifies appropriate technologies to reducing the environmental impacts for the industries and institutions properly using more efficiency techniques.
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I wrote two possible corrections. Both are alike, but one assumes the description talks of preparing a student to be a professional, and the other talks of preparing the student for the profession.
You have the general idea down right, but the word choices could be better. Note the deleted words and the added words in the corrections that are below:
(Description about my college course. ) How could I write it better ?
The professional of Energy Efficiency and Energy Management professional efficiently manages the economy's issues, takes makes decisions about production, distribution, consumption and energy saving for the companies and institutions. The appropriate course that prepares the student for the this professional manager position combining combines the technical knowledge about bringing energy systems to the energy market, acting applied business strategy, project management, finance and the leadership challenges. This professional mange action The manager implements for the rational energy consumption and correctly identifies appropriate technologies to reducing reduce the environmental impacts for the of industries and institutions properly through using more efficiency efficient techniques.
Or, did you mean the following?
The profession of Energy Efficiency and Energy Management efficiently manages the economy's issues, takes makes decisions about production, distribution, consumption and energy saving for the companies and institutions. The appropriate course that prepares the student for the this professional manager career combining combines the technical knowledge about bringing energy systems to the energy market, acting applied business strategy, project management, finance and the leadership challenges. This professional mange action This profession implements for the rational energy consumption and correctly identifies appropriate technologies to reducing reduce the environmental impacts for the of industries and institutions properly through using more efficiency efficient techniques.
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