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Essay. Could you pleade chek it? It is the task from my advanced student's book. This essay is based on a recent discussion about how important it is to give children the opportunity to take care of animals and it aims to highlight two main concerns. First, looking after an animal can give children lots of information about its habits, behaviour and other aspects of natural life which are studied in theory at school. It provides children with a great opportunity to implement knowledge they gain by reading books and watching films about wild life. Therefore it will enable children to memorise well everything they learn about nature because knowledge being used in real life is captured bettter. Beyond that play (play with pets in our case) is a vital part of the childrens life and using it as an educational tool is a good method to teach something in a fun and effective way. Children will get a valuable insight into the life of animals, unobtrusively. Second, the significance of taking care of animals can hardly be overestimated in regard to the influence it has on character building. When communicating with animals, feeding them, walking with them and cleaning everything after them, children learn how to be more responsible, thoughtful and caring. This can have positive effect both in personal and in public aspects. Considerate, well-organised and patient person is likely to become good family member, better worker and more environmentally friendly and responsible society member. In conclusion I would like to mention that, in my opinion, personal reason is more important than the educational one, because features of the character provide a base for the happy and successful life. People with highly developed emotional intelligence and kind hearts are capable to form the society we all want to live in.

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Essay. Could you pleade chek it? It is the task from my advanced student's book.

This essay is based on a recent discussion about how important it is to give children the opportunity to take care of animals and it aims to highlight two main concerns.
First, looking after an animal can give children lots of information about its habits, behaviour and other aspects of natural life which are studied in theory at school. It provides children with a great opportunity to implement knowledge they gain by reading books and watching films about wild life. Therefore it will enable children to memorise well everything they learn about nature because knowledge being used in real life is captured bettter. Beyond that play (play with pets in our case) is a vital part of the childrens life and using it as an educational tool is a good method to teach something in a fun and effective way. Children will get a valuable insight into the life of animals, unobtrusively.
Second, the significance of taking care of animals can hardly be overestimated in regard to the influence it has on character building. When communicating with animals, feeding them, walking with them and cleaning everything after them, children learn how to be more responsible, thoughtful and caring. This can have a positive effect both in personal and in public aspects. A Considerate, well-organised and patient person is likely to become a good family member, better worker and a more environmentally friendly and responsible society member.
In conclusion I would like to mention that, in my opinion, personal reasons are is more important than the educational one, because features of the character provide a base for the a happy and successful life. People with highly developed emotional intelligence and kind hearts are capable to form of forming the society we all want to live in.

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