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A wonderful girl make me embarrassing. What should I do?? Girls, your advice? ) Actually I don't like her voice , it isn't horrible voice, anyway she is very beautiful even when she is close to me I feel shortage oxygen (demand to breath). I want to say her "I don't like you and stop to kill me! " but maybe I should to talk to her and say: Lets go to know about each other more. О мой бог

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A wonderful girl makes me embarrassed. What should I do?? Girls, your advice? )

Actually I don't like her voice , it isn't horrible voice, anyway She is very beautiful, even when she is close to me I feel short of breath/like I can't breathe shortage oxygen (demand to breath). I want to say to her, "I don't like you and stop to kill me! " but maybe I should to talk to her and say: "Lets get go to know about each other better more," instead.
О мой бог

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Notes:
  1. This sentence is a little awkward. Perhaps "There's a wonderful girl I'm having trouble talking to," would work better.
  2. Very beautiful is informal and sounds awkward. Google "beautiful synonyms" for words that mean the same thing with different nuances. For this I recommend "gorgeous".
  3. This sounds like an insult 'n_n. I can't really understand what you're trying to say here, but it makes it sound like you dislike her.

Corrections:
  1. If it's a continuing occurrence you should put an S at the end of the verb.
  2. When you're using "embarrass" as an adjective you put an -ed on the end of it.
  3. Was the parenthesis a typo? Either way it doesn't belong there.
  4. Irrelevant
  5. Added a comma
  6. Without "just", "even" does not make much sense.
  7. Either of these are grammatically correct but the first one is kind of proper and makes you sound like either a theater nerd or a snob and the second makes you sound like a hopeless romantic. There's really no good way to say this.
  8. You have to have "to" in between the verb and the object.
  9. Requires a comma
  10. Putting "to" before a verb is called infinitive tense and it has very specific uses. Disregarding that to talk to her implies to say something so it's unnecessary.
  11. Quotation marks are required before and after (without spaces) anything being said.
  12. "Get" and "go" are two different verbs. To go is to move from one place to the next, to get is almost a default verb with so many meanings (all distinct with separate context) that I cannot define it. In this particular context it is part of the phrase "get to know" and lacks any actual meaning. Never the less it is the only verb that fits here.
  13. You can omit "about" in this case because you're not learning about the person, you're knowing them.
  14. "More" generally implies quantity, but in this case it's knowing. Knowing is a skill and we don't get more of a skill, we improve it, therefore in this situation you have to use "knowing better".
  15. I'm assuming this is an alternative to what you want to say. If so, instead should be somewhere in this sentence, and this particular spot works.

Good luck! As a girl I recommend being bold and telling her you think she's pretty and like her.
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This was previously a comment recommending you not post relationship questions here, but now I much better understand notes, so I deleted it.

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