Meeting minute ( correction is needed please)
Dear Mr. Jones, Murphy, Gray, Prior,
According to our prior meeting, the following decisions were taken:
-Smoking outside the company premises is forbidden starting from January: smoking damages not only the corporate image but also the proper management of the workplace.
-Mister Loft is now discharged from its responsibilities and he is in charge to find a middleman to make easy our entry into the Chinese market.
- 1 employee out of 10 is a woman. We don't reach the legal minimum number. Mister Jones will be careful:pay more attention when it comes to hiring the two future: upcoming assistants.
- As a corporate representative in the collective bargainings in order to catch up our french competitor, Mister Prior will follow a formation on how to deal with cultural differences in the company.
- The Board of directors would love that the executives apologize when our employees make a mistake when it comes to making a mistake in taking a supplier's order.
- Mister Jones is honored to announce that he will offer welcome drinks next Friday in the afternoon.
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Meeting minutes ( correction is needed please)
Dear Mr. Jones, Murphy, Gray, Prior,
According to the minutes of our meeting on (put the date) , the following decisions were taken:
-As of January, smoking outside the company premises will be forbidden: smoking damages not only the corporate image but also the proper management of the workplace. unclear and missing a verb (as smoking doesn't damage the proper management)
-Mister Loft is now discharged from his responsibilities and he is in charge of finding a middleman to ease our entry into the Chinese market.
- 1 employee out of 10 is a woman. (Only one out of ten of our employees is a woman) We don't reach the legal minimum number. (this is below the legal minimum) Mister Jones will be carefully pay more attention when it comes to hiring the two future: upcoming assistants.
- As a corporate representative in the collective bargaining discussions on how to catch up to our French competitor, Mister Prior will follow a formation unclear what you want to say. Do you mean : will create/devise a plan; will form a committee to discusshow to deal with cultural differences in the company.
- The Board of directors would love that the executives to apologize when our employees make a mistake when it comes to making a mistake in taking a supplier's order.
- Mister Jones is happy to announce that he will offer welcome drinks next Friday in the afternoon.
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