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A letter Dear Mr Trellis Thank you for the award,it's fantastic to hear such great news. We will definitely attend the conference on February 19.However,there are a number of things I would like to check with you. Firstly,about a topic for the talk, I would suggest talking about the trends of economic in the following year. Secondly, could you please prepare a microphone and projector for me ?Lastly,is it possible to invite some members of our staff to attend the conference? Please feel free to contact me if you have any questions.look forward to hearing from you soon. Best regards Ann

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A letter

Dear Mr Trellis
Thank you for the award,it's fantastic to hear such great newsI am humbled to be receiving this award.
We will definitely attend the conference on February 19.However,there are a number of few things I would like to check with you. Firstly,about a topic for the talk, I would like to suggest talking about the trends of economic in the following year. Do you think a topic I proposed would be appropriate for the event? Secondly, I will need some some technology for my presentation. Could you please help me prepare a microphone and projector for me? Lastly,I wanted to invite members of the staff to the event. Do I have the option to invite guests? members of our staff to attend the conference? Please feel free to contact me if you have any questions.Look forward to hearing from you soon.
Best regards
Ann

Ann,

Great paragraph! Nice introduction and conceptual structure. I changed the second sentence so that the sentence reads better. Next, Setup: "there are a few things I would like to check with you". Good, the reader knows why you are writing and what they will be reading. After this, the changes I made were to show what you did in the first sentence and what you are checking with the reader in the second. Hope this helps out

Congratulations on the award
David

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