Dealing with rising crime rates
Nowadays, there are some citizens too scared to go out due to the increasing crime rate. There are some people advocate that we should take some measures to prevent crime, while others claim that they have nothing to do with reducing criminal behavior. This essay will discuss both views and make my conclusion.
On the one hand, some people are pessimistic about the current situation. They think they just are ordinary public, and what they do just have few impacts on criminals. They argue that one of the reasons for committing crimes is those people are too poor because of the income gap, and those people have no choices. They feel that they cannot take any useful steps because it would be in vain to against human nature. For example, they said that poor people are too hungry to steal money is inevitable.
On the other hand, however, other people give some achievable advice to improve the circumstance. If the government can provide free training courses and more job opportunities for unemployed people, there will occur less crime, because people will not take adventures to commit crimes when they can support themselves. Meanwhile, police should be better-trained and better-equipped to protect the citizens and deterrent criminals. For instance, we can fund police to buy new equipment and weapons with better quality, or recruit more police.
From my perspective, I definitely agree that we should take some measures to reduce the crime rate, rather than just complain and negative cope with the current situation. In a nutshell, we can provide equal and fair opportunities to narrow the gap between the rich and the poor, and improve police force to protect us better.
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-- Very well written.
-- 'on the other hand' and 'however' mean essentially the same thing. I would remove one of the phrases.
Dealing with rising crime rates
Nowadays, there are some citizens too scared to go out due to the increasing crime rate. There are some people advocate that we should take some measures to prevent crime, while others claim that they have nothing to do with reducing criminal behavior. This essay will discuss both views and make my conclusion.
On the one hand, some people are pessimistic about the current situation. They think they just are ordinary public, and what they do just have few impacts on criminals. They argue that one of the reasons for committing crimes is those people are too poor because of the income gap, and those people have no choices. They feel that they cannot take any useful steps because it would be in vain to fight against human nature. For example, they said that poor people are too hungry so that to stealing money is inevitable.
On the other hand, however, other people give some achievable advice to improve the circumstance. If the government can provide free training courses and more job opportunities for unemployed people, there will occur less crime, because people will not take adventures to commit crimes when they can support themselves. Meanwhile, police should be better-trained and better-equipped to protect the citizens and deterrent criminals. For instance, we can fund police to buy new equipment and weapons with better quality, or recruit more police.
From my perspective, I definitely agree that we should take some measures to reduce the crime rate, rather than just complain and negative cope with the current situation. In a nutshell, we can provide equal and fair opportunities to narrow the gap between the rich and the poor, and improve police force to protect us better.
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