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An embarrassing moment in my life. I had an embarrassing moment two years ago because I forgot my purse at house while I was going on the way to my school. When I realised that I didn't bring my purse, I immediately started looking for money in my backpack. (Because when I receive change, I usually put that money in a pocket of my backpack) but I didn't have anything and i didn't know why . I didn't know what to do, i was pretty afraid so i decided to call to my friend. I remembered that he lived near to the stop where I had to get off however, while i was talking with my friend, a Mr paid my ticket, i wanted to cry because he was kind and i didn't expect that someone paid for me. I expressed my gratitude to him and he offered me money but i said to him that it wasn't necessary because my friend was on way. But i said thanks.

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An embarrassing moment in my life.

I had an embarrassing moment two years ago because I forgot my purse at home while I was on the way to school.

When I realised that I didn't bring my purse, I immediately started looking for money in my backpack. (Because when I receive change, I usually put that money in a pocket of my backpack) but I didn't have anything and I didn't know why . I didn't know what to do, I was pretty afraid so I decided to call to my friend. I remembered that he lived near the stop where I had to get off; however, while I was talking with my friend, a stranger paid my ticket. I wanted to cry because he was kind and I didn't expect that someone would pay it for me. I expressed my gratitude to him and he offered me money but I told him it wasn't necessary because my friend was the way. I said thanks though.
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An embarrassing moment in my life.

I had an embarrassing moment two years ago when I forgot my purse at home while I was going on the way to my school.

When I realised that I had forgotten my purse, I immediately started looking for money in my backpack, (when I receive change, I usually put that money in a pocket of my backpack), but I didn't have any, and I didn't know why. I didn't know what to do and I was pretty afraid, so I decided to call to my friend. I remembered that he lived near to the stop where I had to get off. However, while I was talking with my friend, a man paid for my ticket. I wanted to cry because he was so kind, and I didn't expect that someone would pay for it. I expressed my gratitude to him and he offered me some money, but I told him that it wasn't necessary because my friend was on the way. (My friend was coming) But I said thanks.

I made a few corrections, and offered a few suggestions (in blue).
Very good Maricela!

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