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About Winter Night Market in Melbourne. Melbourne is one of the biggest city in Australia. There are many people from variety of countries, living or studying. The city is also well known as its multicultural, artistic and traditional city. There are many events, taking place everywhere, everytime throughout the year. The Winter Night Market is one of the famous multicultural event in winter. Many people enjoy a lot of food, musics and different cultures. But there are the pros and cons, taking place this event. One of the advantages of doing Winter Night Market is that the event brings not only people who live in Melbourne but also a lot of tourists from foreign countries. They spend many money for food, drinks and souvenirs. It’s a good benefit to economy of the city. Furthermore, the event makes a lot of jobs for local people. For example, event organizer, security guards and cleaner. It help to grow the local society. However, There are also disadvantages in it. The event makes tons of rubbish in only few days. It is a bad for environment and a city council has to pay many mony for rubbish corrector from our tax. Another disadvantages is traffic jam. Many people come here and go home in a short time, it causes serious traffic congestion. In my view, of course there are the pros and cons but the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. These kind of events bring many benefit to economy. Many foreign students would choose to go studying in Melbourne. it will be vitarased its society. Therefore, taking place this event is a good idea.

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Melbourne's Winter Night Market

Melbourne is one of the biggest cities in Australia. There are many people from a variety of countries living or studying here. It is also well-known as a multicultural, artistic and traditional city. There are many events taking place all over the city everytime throughout the year. The winter night market is one of the famous ones. Many people enjoy the food, music and cultural activities there very much but there are both pros and cons in hosting it.

One of the advantages of hosting the winter night market is that the event attracts not only the locals but also many of tourists from foreign countries. They spend a lot of money on food, drinks and souvenirs. It is very beneficial to the city's economy. Furthermore, the event creates a lot of jobs for local people. For example as event organizers, security guards and cleaners. It also helps with community development.

However, there are also disadvantages in it. The event results in tons of rubbish being produced in only a few days. It is a bad for the environment and the city council has to waste a lot of money on rubbish collection paid for by our taxes. Another disadvantage is traffic jams. Many people come here and go home within a short space of time thereby causing serious traffic congestion.

In my view, of course there are the pros and cons but the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. These kinds of events bring many benefits to the economy. I think many foreign students would choose to study in Melbourne if we had more events like these as they revitalize the local economy. Therefore, hosting this event is a good idea.

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