The Air Conditioner Was Down
Recently, it's been the hottiest days in Shanghai this year. While trouples never come singly- the air conditioner in my bedroom was down. I sent a we-chat message to the landlord asking for his help. My landlord used to be a maintenance technician. He could fix everything and I’m a big fan of him.
As always, he took a quick action to investigate the issue on site. Afte that, he dialed the hot line and explained to the customer service lady everything except the model type because it was in alphaets and numbers. I was glad to offer help because it made me feel I was partipating the project. Since I was a kid, I had a dream that I would be able to mend appliances at home. Unfortunately the truth was the dream did not come true; another truth was my landlor could not fix the air conditioner and he needed technical support from the company.
The next day, my landlord asked me to fight against the high temperature for one day more because the company staffs' schedule were full. They kept their words and I had the cool air soon after that. But a new issue came : whom can we call to fix the air conditioner for the Earth?
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The Air Conditioner Was Down Broken
Recently, it's been the hottiest days in Shanghai this year. While But troubples never come singly- the air conditioner in my bedroom was down broken. I sent a we-chat message to the landlord asking for his help. My landlord used to be a maintenance technician. He could fix everything and I’m a big fan of him.
As always, he took a quick action to investigate the issue on site. After that, he dialed the hot line and explained to the customer service lady everything except the model type because it was in alphaets letters and numbers. I was glad to offer help because it made me feel like I was participating in the project. Since I was a kid, I had a dream that I would be able to mend appliances at home. Unfortunately the truth was the dream did not come true; another truth was my landlord could not fix the air conditioner and he needed technical support from the company.
The next day, my landlord asked me to fight against bear with the high temperature for one day more because the company's staffs' schedule were was full. They kept their words and I had the cool air soon after that. But a new issue came : whom can we call to fix the air conditioner for the Earth?
Great work Kailin! I have made a few corrections to make it sound more natural.
The words in yellow are not wrong but don't sound natural so I have suggested the words in pink instead.
The blue is for spelling mistakes or missing words.
You could say "the company staff's schedule" or "the company's schedule" but you can't say "the company staffs' schedule" because that suggests there is more than one set of staff.
The words in orange "the truth was" are not wrong but don't sound natural so I suggest deleting them.
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