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Building health dietary environment Recently, the city of New York is Department of Health wants to limit the size of all sweetened drinks to sixteen ounce.I believe that the government proposed ban is great.People eat too much sugar is easy become to obesity.Obesity is a major health problem that we need to do something about.Obesity is prone to some disease, especially diabetes for adults and older.In addiction, if children eat more much sugar, they will gain more weight.It is bad for them growth.The department control the size of sweetened drinks will help residents control the calories they consume and that this will help lose weight..however,I think that the government proposed ban is good for everyone, and building a health dietary environment.

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Building a healthy dietary environment

Recently, the city of New York's is Department of Health wanted to limit the portion size of all sweetened drinks to sixteen ounce. I believe that the government's proposed ban is great. People Eating and drinking too much sugar is makes it easy to become to obesity obese.Obesity is a major health problem that we need to do something about.Obesity is makes us prone to some disease, especially diabetes for adults and older the elderly. In addiction addition, if children eat and drink more much sugar , they will gain more weight (easily). It is bad for them their growth.The department's decision to control the portion size of sweetened drinks will help residents control (or limit) the calories they consume and that this will help them lose weight..however, I think that the government's proposed ban is good for everyone, and in building a healthy dietary environment.

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