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Topic 2: hometown My hometown is Anlu, a small county-level city which is located in the northeast part of Hubei province, Central China. It has a territory of 1300 square kilometers, with a population of approximately half million. It’s really a special and wonderful place with a long history that has been recorded since 200 BC. One of the most famous Chinese ancient poets, Li Po, spent about 10 years living here to withdraw from official circles and write poems. Besides, there're some well-protected ginkgoes beyond 1000 years old, which were planted by him. In the past decade, I had a privilege for witness the huge changes in Anlu. The urban area had been expanded almost twice, quite a number of people migrated into city from nearby towns and countryside. Nowadays, both the economy and environment here are good and these provide a favorable atmosphere. I was born in there and spent more than two thirds of my life here. There are so many incredible landscape, fascinating culture and warm dwellers. I love it so much and I think it is my only true hometown forever. If I had to pick one natural thing that I am not satisfied, it must be the climate: It is quite typical, which means the summer is too hot while the winter is too cold for me to stand. Since its development is not as fast as some developed cities, the shortage of knowledgeable employment opportunities and low-educational levels in my hometown are not beneficial for personal development. Therefore, I decided to move out in order to improve myself in my study life as well as my career path. I guess I would move back after my retirement. By the way, welcome travel to China! If you go by Anlu, I'll definitely recommend you to have a drink of rice wine, which is my favorite specialty in my hometown.

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Topic 2: hometown

My hometown is Anlu, a small county-level city which is located in the northeast part of Hubei province, Central China. It has a territory of 1300 square kilometers, with a population of approximately half million.

It’s really a special and wonderful place with a long history that has been recorded since 200 BC. One of the most famous Chinese ancient poets, Li Po, spent about 10 years living here to withdraw from official circles and write poems. Besides this, there're some well-protected ginkgoes (ginkgo trees that are) beyond a 1000 years old, which were planted by him.

In the past decade, I had a the privilege for of witnessing the (can delete "the") huge changes in Anlu . The urban area had been expanded to almost twice (its size/ population? need to specify), quite a number of people migrated into to the city from nearby towns and countryside. Nowadays, both the economy and environment here are good and these provide a favorable atmosphere.

I was born in there here and spent more than two thirds of my life here. There are so many incredible landscapes, (because of "so many") fascinating culture and warm dwellers. I love it so much and I think it is Anlu will be my only true hometown forever. If I had to pick one natural thing that I am not (completely) satisfied, it must be ("has to be" sounds better) the climate: It is quite typical, which means the summer is too hot while the winter is too cold for me to stand bear.

Since its development is not as fast as some (other) developed cities, the shortage of knowledgeable skilled employment opportunities and low-educational levels in my hometown are not beneficial for personal development. Therefore, I decided to move out in order to improve myself in my study life as well as my career path. I guess I would move back after my retirement.

By the way, you are welcome to travel to China! If you go by Anlu, I 'll definitely recommend that you to have a drink of rice wine, which is my favorite speciality in my hometown.

Well written with good paragraphing. Wow!!!, the tree is absolutely stunning. Is that the Ginkgo tree in Autumn ?
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