Animals in extinction
Often we read articles about endangered species. The problem nowadays is serious since there are a lot of factors that threaten the animals. First of all, poachers kill animals like bears for their fur and elephants for their ivory. Also climate changes affect animals because the environment deteriorates for them. For instance, if global temperature rises the ice of Antarctica melts and this is not convenient for seals and sea elephants. Water pollution and other wastes also worsen animals' life. Fortunately, conservationists and people who love animals act against all these dangers. They organise campaigns in order to inform the public about the problem and its roots. Also protect some species by feeding and assist them to reproduce.
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Animals in extinction
Often we read articles about endangered species. The problem nowadays is serious since there are a lot of factors that threaten the animals. First of all, poachers kill animals like bears for their fur and elephants for their ivory. Climate change also affects animals because the environment deteriorates for them (Better: because it harms the environment/ because it harms the environments in which they live). For instance,as global temperatures rise, the ice of Antarctica melts and this is not convenient (better: this is harmful) for seals and sea elephants. Water pollution and other wastes also worsen animals' lives (or 'animal life). Fortunately, conservationists and people who love animals act against all these dangers. They organise campaigns in order to inform the public about the problem and its roots. They also protect some species by feeding them and assisting them in reproducing.
Note: You have used the simple present tense here (below), which indicates a fact (there are organizations which do these things)
Fortunately, conservationists and people who love animals act against all these dangers. They organise campaigns in order to inform the public about the problem and its roots. They also protect some species by feeding them and assisting them in reproducing.
However, you can also use the present continuous tense to show that these are ongoing efforts by these groups.
Fortunately, conservationists and people who love animals ARE ACTING against all these dangers. They ARE ORGANIZING campaigns in order to inform the public about the problem and its roots. They ARE ALSO PROTECTING some species by feeding them and assisting them in reproducing.
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It’s pretty good. You should avoid starting sentences with also. Some sentences are a bit awkward and would be made clearer if you expanded on your point e.g. the environment deteriorates for them.
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Animals in extinction
Often we read articles about endangered species. The problem nowadays is serious since there are a lot of factors that threaten the animals. First of all, poachers kill animals like bears for their fur and elephants for their ivory. Climate change also affects animals because the environment deteriorates for them. For instance, if global temperature rises the ice of Antarctica melts and this is not convenient for seals and sea elephants. Water pollution and other waste also worsens animals' life. Fortunately, conservationists and people who love animals act against all these dangers. They organise campaigns in order to inform the public about the problem and its roots. Furthermore, they protect some species by feeding and assist them to reproduce.
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