A letter to a community official
Dear Mr. Jones,
I am writing to you on behalf of a group of musicians in the orchestra named Galaxy. We have been using the community hall every Monday and Wednesday evenings. However, we have been told that we will no longer be able to practice in the hall from the next week without being told the reason of it.
The orchestra has made many successful concert tours around the country. The income is quite considerable and it is our custom to donate at least 30 percent of it to our community. The money is used in developing and maintaining a training program to help those jobless people learn practical skills to find jobs.
I am wondering if it is possible that you could help us by arranging other days and times for us to rehearse. Tuesdays and Fridays would also be excellent for us. I really appreciate your time reading this letter and I hope to discuss this matter further with you.
I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours sincerely,
Boshi.
Manager of Galaxy Orchestra.
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A letter to a community official
Dear Mr. Jones,
I am writing to you on behalf of a group of musicians in the orchestra named Galaxy. We have been using the community hall every Monday and Wednesday evenings. However, we have been told that we will no longer be able to practice in the hall from next week.without being told the reason of it.
The orchestra has made many successful concert tours around the country. Our income is quite considerable and it is our custom to donate at least 30 percent of it to our community. The money is used in developing and maintaining a training program to help jobless people learn practical skills to find jobs.
I was wondering if it is possible that you could help us by arranging other days and times for us to rehearse? Tuesdays and Fridays would also be excellent for us. I really appreciate your time reading this letter and I hope to discuss this matter further with you.
I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours sincerely,
Boshi.
Manager of Galaxy Orchestra.
A good letter, just a couple of changes I would make.
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