First notebook entry: Introducing myself

Because I want to emigrate, I have to make my English better than before.however, I'm now in China. I can't find a foreigner to help my English So ,I come here...

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

Because I want to emigrate, ...so I have to make my English (much) better than before.  But (better with: However, ) I'm now in China.  I can't find a foreigner to help my English (better with: ... to help me improve my English). by myself...s  So, I come here...

註：
1) 我[或：誰]想(做 ......) = I want [or: who wants] to (do ...)；即是說，want to 後面是加上動詞不定式，而不是名詞。
2) 漢語中主從句連接詞，如「雖然(although) ...... 但是(but) ...... 」、「因為(because) ...... 所以(therefore) ...... 」、「如果(if) ...... 那麼(then) ...... 」等，在西歐語言中只需其中一個，而不能在主句和從句都加上相關的連接詞。 
3) 在一篇短短的文章上，沒有不要用上那麼多的省略號。


Good day.  /  祝　是日安好。

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

Because I want（ to） emigration，（so） I have to make my English better than before.But I'm in china. I can't find a foreigner to help my English by myself...so I come here...
句中有了because就不应该用so了：）