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Hi English native speakers! I need a revision of this paragraph, please! This dissertation is divided into two parts. First, it is necessary for this project to give a clear definition of ‘phraseme’, to outline classes and functions of phrasemes, and to look briefly into Arturo Pérez-Reverte's life and writing style, since they are closely related to the use of phrasemes in titles. Secondly, the data will be qualitatively analysed and classified, and it will be ascertained whether they have undergone phraseological manipulation. A translation will be proposed, along with commentary on the issues in translation, and a final reflection on the importance of correctly translating phrasemes into other languages.

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Hi English native speakers! I need a revision of this paragraph, please!

This dissertation is divided into two parts. First of all, it is necessary for this project to give a clear definition of phraseme, its classes and functions and to do a bit of research into Arturo Pérez-Reverte's life and writing style, since they are closely related to the use of phraseologisms in the titles. Secondly, these headings will be analysed and classified, it will be ascertained whether they have undergone phraseological manipulation, it will be proposed a translation while commenting on the difficulties and there will be a final reflection on the importance of correctly translating phraseologisms into other languages.

I'm struggling to work out how to approach this correction ; at a minimal level of clear grammatical problems, or with suggested possible "improvements" for you to consider. Minimal first.

This dissertation is divided into two parts. First, it is necessary for this project to give a clear definition of "phraseme", to outline classes and functions of phrasemes, and to ("do a bit of research into" seems not appropriate in this academic style or context - perhaps "briefly explore" ?) look briefly into Arturo Pérez-Reverte's life and writing style, since they are closely related to the use of phraseologisms (why this switch of word? Isn't this "elegant variation"?) in titles. Secondly, these headings* will be analysed and classified, and it will be ascertained whether they have undergone phraseological manipulation. A translation will be proposed, along with commentary on the issues in translation, and there will be a final reflection on the importance of correctly translating phraseologisms into other languages.

* Which headings ? We should be told ! It appears that this is a follow-on paragraph, and without sight of the introductory text appropriate commentary is very difficult.

OK, that's what I see as minimal for "correct" English. There are some remaining issues of language, leaving aside the content so far as possible. You appear to use the neologisms "phraseologism" and "phraseme " interchangeably, though neither is yet in the full OED, nor in Merriam-Webster, and both appear to be used to mean "idiom", or perhaps "set phrase". Might you do better to stick with one word for the one meaning throughout this short piece? Secondly, the switch down from a broad academic perspective on "phraseologisms" to the narrower emphasis of the work of one writer appears an inversion of logic. It appears that you want to study the work of this writer - but find yourself over-claiming that he is in some way synonymous with or at least central to any study of phraseologisms; surely a claim you will find hard to substantiate? Perhaps this is enough of commentary that you don't really want. Hope it helps :)
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Hi English native speakers! I need a revision of this paragraph, please!

This dissertation is divided into two parts. First of all, it is necessary for this project to give a clear definition of phraseme, its classes and functions and to do a bit of research into Arturo Pérez-Reverte's life and writing style, since they are closely related to the use of phraseologisms in the titles. Secondly, these headings will be analysed and classified it will be ascertained to determine whether they have undergone phraseological manipulation. it will be proposed A translation together with commentary on the associated difficulties will be detailed, followed by a final reflection on the importance of correctly translating phraseologisms into other languages.

Keep an eye on not including too many separate ideas in the one sentence. The sentence becomes too long and unwieldy. But this is just my opinion. I broke the last sentence up, but there's several ways of doing it. Mine is one suggestion.

Hope this helps a little.
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Thank you all very much for your time and help!
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That is much better now I like it :)
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This is looking good to me :)

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