Letter: You are going to another country to study.
LETTER:
You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.
Write a letter to your friend. In your letter,
• give details of your study plans
• explain why you want to get a part-time job
• suggest how your friend could help you find a job
Dear Tom,
I’m writing to let you know that I’m coming to your marvellous town because I will attend an Information Technology course there. Obviously, I don’t know the place and I will need some helps.
I booked an advanced IT course which is beginning the 28th of June and last for 45 days. I believe that this is a very interesting class because the main area of the curriculum is about software development and as you know very well I like so much computers.
I have to tell you that I don’t have enough money to maintain me for my two months stay in Berlin, so I’m looking for a part-time job for different reasons such as to pay an accommodation and to eat out with some classmates at weekends.
I’d like to ask you for some helps in consideration that you’ve been living there since 2015 and I’m sure you know very well the town and the surroundings. First of all, you could help me to look for a job and secondly, you should ask to your mother in law, who works in a real estate agency, whether she can rent me a little flat.
Thanking you in advance, I look forward to receiving your reply as soon as possible.
All the best
Peter
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LETTER:
You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.
Write a letter to your friend. In your letter,
• give details of your study plans
• explain why you want to get a part-time job
• suggest how your friend could help you find a job
Dear Tom,
I’m writing to let you know that I’m coming to your marvellous town to attend an Information Technology course. Obviously, I am unfamiliar with the area and will need help.
I booked an advanced IT course beginning June 28 which will last 45 days. I believe that this is a very interesting class because the main area of the curriculum is about software development. This caters to my fascination with computers.
While I am excited for this course, I recognize that I do not have enough money to support myself during my two months stay in Berlin. As a result of this, I am looking for a part-time job to help pay for accommodations and to eat out with some classmates on weekends.
I’d like to ask you for some help, considering that you have been living in Berlin since 2015. I am sure you know both the town and its surroundings well. I have two requests. First, could you help me look for a job? Second, would you ask your mother in law, who works in a real estate agency, whether or not she could rent me a little flat?
Thank you in advance for the help. I look forward to receiving your reply as soon as possible.
All the best
Peter
You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.
Write a letter to your friend. In your letter,
• give details of your study plans
• explain why you want to get a part-time job
• suggest how your friend could help you find a job
Dear Tom,
I’m writing to let you know that I’m coming to your marvellous town to attend an Information Technology course. Obviously, I am unfamiliar with the area and will need help.
I booked an advanced IT course beginning June 28 which will last 45 days. I believe that this is a very interesting class because the main area of the curriculum is about software development. This caters to my fascination with computers.
While I am excited for this course, I recognize that I do not have enough money to support myself during my two months stay in Berlin. As a result of this, I am looking for a part-time job to help pay for accommodations and to eat out with some classmates on weekends.
I’d like to ask you for some help, considering that you have been living in Berlin since 2015. I am sure you know both the town and its surroundings well. I have two requests. First, could you help me look for a job? Second, would you ask your mother in law, who works in a real estate agency, whether or not she could rent me a little flat?
Thank you in advance for the help. I look forward to receiving your reply as soon as possible.
All the best
Peter
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LETTER:
You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.
Write a letter to your friend. In your letter,
• give details of your study plans
• explain why you want to get a part-time job
• suggest how your friend could help you find a job
Dear Tom,
I’m writing to let you know that I’m coming to your marvellous town because I will attend an Information Technology course there. Obviously, I don’t know the place and I will need some help.
I booked an advanced IT course which begins on the 28th of June and last for 45 days. I believe that this is a very interesting class because the main area of the curriculum is about software development and as you know very well I like computers a lot.
I have to tell you that I don’t have enough money to support myself during my two months stay in Berlin, so I’m looking for a part-time job to pay an accommodation and to eat out with some classmates at weekends.
I’d like to ask you for some help since you’ve been living there since 2015 and I’m sure you know very well the town and the surroundings. First of all, you could help me look for a job and secondly, you should ask your mother-in-law, who works in a real estate agency, whether she can rent me a little flat.
Thank you in advance, I look forward to receiving your reply as soon as possible.
All the best
Peter
You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.
Write a letter to your friend. In your letter,
• give details of your study plans
• explain why you want to get a part-time job
• suggest how your friend could help you find a job
Dear Tom,
I’m writing to let you know that I’m coming to your marvellous town because I will attend an Information Technology course there. Obviously, I don’t know the place and I will need some help.
I booked an advanced IT course which begins on the 28th of June and last for 45 days. I believe that this is a very interesting class because the main area of the curriculum is about software development and as you know very well I like computers a lot.
I have to tell you that I don’t have enough money to support myself during my two months stay in Berlin, so I’m looking for a part-time job to pay an accommodation and to eat out with some classmates at weekends.
I’d like to ask you for some help since you’ve been living there since 2015 and I’m sure you know very well the town and the surroundings. First of all, you could help me look for a job and secondly, you should ask your mother-in-law, who works in a real estate agency, whether she can rent me a little flat.
Thank you in advance, I look forward to receiving your reply as soon as possible.
All the best
Peter
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Hi Jane, thanks so much for your advice.... see you
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Hi Stefano, I read through your letter and left a response clearing up some of your letter. I think you have a good grasp of sentence structure. One thing I will warn you against in letters is contractions (words like I'm, you're, don't etc).
While the person receiving a letter is a friend, in today's age, physically writing a letter is often considered a more formal means of communication as compared to something like a text. Emails are the same way, being much more formal than a text.
Please also take a look as to how I worded the end of your letter. When asking a friend for help, try to be as polite as possible, keeping in mind that a friend does not have to help you at all. You're initial letter came off as a little rude as each request was posed as a demand (using periods to end sentences) instead of requests (using question marks to end sentences).
Hope this helps!
Chris
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Stefano: Your writing is really good. But one thing I would like to tell you is that you shouldn't use present continuous with the verb "thanks". It should be better if we say "thanks in advance" or "thank you in advance".
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