technology & find job Technology & Finding Employment (Capitalize title, this is also a little more descriptive & natural sounding)

In a word, In this era of science and technology, the increasing use of technology in the workplace can help people gain job work more efficiently, no matter whether they are young or old. Young people can benefit in their job search from having proficient technology skills, while experienced older people with these skills will be favored by employers from service industry(Is it just the service industry that will favor these people?). Finding a job sometimes can be hard difficult (hard is correct, but personally I prefer difficult here) but having the ability to work comfortably with technology will make you more attractive to employers. and sometimes not, it mostly depends on people’s own choices.

Your first sentence talks about how technology in the workplace can help people work more efficiently, while your paragraph focused on how being able to use technology makes you more employable, no matter what your age/experience level is. This is a good article, but my advice would be to make your first sentence more directly relevant to the rest of the paragraph.