A business report: A trade fair (247 words)
*This story is fictional.
I attended a trade fair in another country recently. My manager has asked me to write a report about my visit to the fair. I'm going to write about a) which other companies were represented, b) how I spend my time, c) what information I obtained, and d) whether or not I recommend my manager attending the fair next year and its reason.
The fair was carried out at Osaka, Japan. This fair was international car trade fair. There were famous global motor companies, for example, TOYOTA, PEUGEOT, PORSCHE, BMW, etc. There were a lot of the latest motors from for sports to for families.
I looked around various cars and asked representatives about the primary function and price of their latest car.
The most impressive car was TOYOTA's XYZ. It can carry seven people, and it has various safety functions, for example, an automatic brake, an assisted operation when you over the line, and an automatic parking system which you don't need to grab your handle. The automatic parking system was like a Sci-Fi movie. Even if such great function it has, price is not too high. It will be around $50,000 on the market.
I recommend you attend the fair next year because you can learn the latest information about the current motor market directly. If you have questions about cars, you could ask whatever. If you know such information, it could help to improve our motor sales.
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A business report: A trade fair (247 words)
*This story is fictional.I attended a trade fair in another country recently. My manager has asked me to write a report about my visit to the fair. I'm going to write about a) which other companies were represented, b) how I spend my time, c) what information I obtained, and d) whether or not I recommend my manager attending the fair next year and its the reason.
The fair was carried out at Osaka, Japan. This fair was an international car trade fair, so there were famous global motor companies there including, TOYOTA, PEUGEOT, PORSCHE and BMW. There were a lot of the latest motors cars from sports to family types.
I looked around various cars at several and asked the representatives about their the primary function and price of their cars.
The most impressive car was TOYOTA's XYZ. It can carry seven people, and it has various safety functions. For example, an automatic brake, an assisted operation to warn you when you are over the line, and an automatic parking system which so you don't need to grab your the handle. The automatic parking system was like a Sci-Fi movie. Even for such great functions, the price is not too high. It will be around $50,000 on the market.
I recommend that you attend the fair next year, because you can learn obtain the latest information about the current motor market directly. If you have any questions about cars, you can ask whatever someone there. If you know such information, The information you obtain at this fair could help to improve our motor sales.
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A business report: A trade fair (247 words)
*This story is fictional.I attended a trade fair in another country recently. My manager has asked me to write a report about my visit to the fair. I'm going to write about: a) which other companies were represented, b) how I spent my time, c) what information I obtained, and d) whether or not I recommend my manager to attending the fair next year and its reason why.
The fair was carried out at took place in Osaka, Japan. This fair was an international car trade fair. There were famous global motor companies from around the world, for example, TOYOTA, PEUGEOT, PORSCHE, BMW, etc. There were a lot of the latest motors (do you mean "cars" or the motors themselves?) from vehicles for sports to those for families. I looked around various cars and asked representatives about the primary functions and prices of their latest cars.
The most impressive car was TOYOTA's XYZ. It can carry seven people, and it has various safety functions, for example, like an automatic brake, an assisted operation when you are over the line, and an automatic parking system for which you don't need to grab your handle steering wheel. The automatic parking system was like from a Sci-Fi movie. Even if with such a great function it has, the price is not too high. It will be around $50,000 on the market.
I recommend you attend the fair next year because you can learn the latest information about the current motor auto market directly. If you have questions about cars, you could ask whatever. If you knew such information, it could help to improve our motor sales.
Great job again! Another tip: as we prefer to avoid overusing words too much in English, it's best to change them up every so often. Instead of using "for example" multiple times, you can use "such as" or "like". You can also replace "because" with "as".
For "motor" do you mean "car"? While we may call them "Motor Shows" they sell cars, which we also call "automobiles" ("auto" for short sometimes if it modifies another word like "auto market").
Also: 車のハンドル = steering wheel.
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