My cousin
I have a cousin who is four years younger than me. She is medium height, and has a friendly round face. She is also very lively and cheerful, very liked by the elders.
She likes collecting dolls most. She has many different dolls and will wear different clothes for them. She is also into Japanese culture, especially Japanese stage plays. When her favorite actors came to China for a tour, she cost an arm and a leg to buy a ticket to the show for the first time.
Since my home is near to hers, so when I was a child, I used to go to their house to play. Then, we became good friends soon. At that time, we often played badminton together. Now, because she is busy in high school, we rarely meet, but we occasionally have meals and watch movies together.
I think we have a lot in common, and get on very well, so I feel lucky to meet her.
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>>> overall, written very well. Just a few things:
My cousin
I have a cousin who is four years younger than me. She is medium height, and has a friendly round face. She is also very lively, and cheerful, and very liked by the elders.She likes collecting dolls the most. She has many different dolls and will wear dress them with different clothes for them. She is also into Japanese culture, especially Japanese stage plays. When her favorite actors came to China for a tour, she cost spent an arm and a leg to buy a ticket to the show for the first time.
Since my home is near to hers, so when I was a child, I used to go to their house to play. Then, we became good friends soon. At that time, we often played badminton together. Now, because she is busy in high school, we rarely meet, but we occasionally have meals and watch movies together.
I think we have a lot in common, and get on very well, so I feel lucky to meet know her.
*** The first comma I crossed out because a comma is only needed if the 2nd part is a complete sentence (and including a subject, which you do not have. That's the way I've been taught.
*** If a person places clothes on another (person or doll), they 'dress' them. A person can only 'wear' clothes themselves.
*** Remove 'so' before 'when I was a child'.
*** I'd rather use the word 'quickly' in place of 'soon'. Not sure if that's technically incorrect the way you put it, but to me it sounds more natural with 'quickly'. A verbal colloquialism would be 'We became friends fast'. That's quite common in verbal speech in my area.
*** 'cost' can be used as a verb, but it's object is only an item which costs the amount specified. A way to use the word 'cost' in a sentence would be 'The tickets she bought cost an arm and a leg'. In summary: people spend money, and merchandise costs money.
*** You can feel lucky to know someone, or feel lucky 'to have met' someone. 'meet' is present tense, and you met her in the ast.
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My cousin
I have a cousin who is four years younger than me. She is medium height, and has a friendly round face. She is also very lively and cheerful, very liked by the elders.The thing she likes most is collecting dolls. She has many different dolls and will dress them in different outfits. She is also into Japanese culture, especially Japanese stage plays. When her favorite actors came to China for a tour, she spent an arm and a leg to buy a ticket to the show for the first time.
Since My home is near to hers, so when I was a child, I used to go to her house to play. We soon became good friends. At that time, we often played badminton together. Now, because she is busy in high school, we rarely meet, but we occasionally have meals and watch movies together.
I think we have a lot in common, and get on very well, so I feel lucky to see her.
Very well done, Yan. Good use of idiomatic English.
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