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I want to visit Finland Could you correct my entry, please) Yuri's mom again tries to involve everybody in a new adventure. Well, that's just like her!!! This time she would like to visit Finland. - Finland? Why Finland? - She says that we whave lots of in common. Karelian and Finnish nature and climate are pretty similar. However we are so different at the same time. And it is good! So she wishes to see those differences because it will help to understand our neigbour better. She would like to visit the country with her family (and we hope she will take us too), together we can learn new about this north land that will help to treat each other with great respect. She likes spend time with her family, to rest together, to enjoy sights and views outside. Nature always gives us new portion of energy. Nature inspires to do crerative things which our family like to do so much! Nature can give a real relax and entertainmet. How can we describe Yuri's mom in short? She likes singing and has beautiful voice. She improves her English and lures all members of her family to do the same read books and watch movies in English. She says that she is a happy person because she has such wonderful family and there are lots of miracles around us. The main reason why she would like to take part in this adventure is to double her happiness and maybe exchange it with somebody else and of course to share it with others! See you!

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I want to visit Finland

Could you correct my entry, please?

Yuri's mom again tries to involve every one in a new adventure.
Well, that's just like her!!!
This time she would like to visit Finland.
- Finland? Why Finland?
- She says that we have lots in common. The nature and climates of Karelia and Finland are pretty similar. However, at the same time, we're also so different. And that is good! So she wishes to see those differences because it will help her to better understand our neighbour. 
She would like to visit the country with her family (and we hope she will take us too). Together, we can learn about this northern land that will help us to treat each other with great respect.
She likes to spend time with her family, to rest with them, to enjoy the sights and views outside.
Nature always gives us fresh energy.
Nature inspires us to do creative things that our family like to do so much!
Nature can provide a real sense of relaxation and entertainment.
How can we describe Yuri's mom, in short?
She likes singing and has a beautiful voice.
She improves her English and entices all members of her family to do the same, to read books and to watch movies in English.
She says that she is a happy person because she has such a wonderful family and there are lots of miracles around us.
The main reason why she would like to take part in this adventure is to increase her level of happiness and maybe exchange it with someone else and, of course, to share it with others!
See you!

Notes: 

1. "That" vs "Which." "Nature inspires to do creative things which our family like to do so much!"

The difference between "that" and "which" is actually something that even many native English speakers struggle with in writing. Luckily, it's fairly easy to learn.

If you want to use "which" in a sentence, you need to separate it with a comma. If you want to use "that," you do not. So for instance, take the sentence, "At the store yesterday, I bought some shirts that I really like." 

I opted to use "that," but if instead you decided to go with "which," the sentence changes: "At the store yesterday, I bought some shirts, which I really like." 

w/that: "At the store yesterday, I bought some shirts that I really like." 

w/which: "At the store yesterday, I bought some shirts, which I really like." 

2. "New energy" vs. "fresh energy." Although you could use "new energy," and this is in some ways a matter of preference, I would say that it's more common to hear a word like "fresh," because energy makes us feel "refreshed," or "enlivened." 

3. "...increase her happiness" vs. "...increase her level of happiness." Again, this is more a matter of preference. You could use both, but more commonly we speak of happiness in terms of levels, because it fluctuates from high to low to everything in between. 

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I want to visit Finland

Could you correct my entry, please)

Yuri's mom again tries to involve everybody in a new adventure.
Well, that's just like her!!!
This time she would like to visit Finland.
- Finland? Why Finland?
- She says that we whave lots of in common. Karelian and Finnish nature and climate are pretty similar. However we are so different at the same time. And it is good! So she wishes to see those differences because it will help to understand our neighbor better.
She would like to visit the country with her family (and we hope she will take us too), and together we can learn new things about this north land that will help us to treat each other with great respect.
She likes spend time with her family, to rest together and to enjoy sights and views outside.
Nature always gives us new portion of energy.
Nature inspires us to do creative things which our family like to do so much!
Nature can give a real relaxation and entertainment.
How can we describe Yuri's mom in short?
She likes singing and has a beautiful voice.
She improves her English and lures all members of her family to do the same by  reading books and watching movies in English.
She says that she is a happy person because she has such wonderful family and there are lots of miracles around us.
The main reason why she would like to take part in this adventure is to double her happiness and maybe exchange it with somebody else and of course to share it with others!
See you!


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