IELTS Part I Line Graph
Requirement: The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
My writing:
The line graph given illustrates the percentage of elderly people living in Japan, Sweden and USA from 1940, with prediction up to 2040.
Overall, the figures for all three nations increased throughout the time and are expected to follow this trend in the future, despite having some fluctuations. Moreover, in 2040, the number of population aged 65 and over living in the Asian country will take rank of that of USA and become the highest among those territories.
In 1940, only 5% of the Japanese residents were seniors, compared to roughly 7% in Sweden and the highest, nearly 10% of USA. From that year until now, 2019, the statistics represented an upward trend, although there were ups and downs, to 8%, 20% and just below 15%, respectively. With the upcoming years of 2020 toward 2040, senior citizens rates in all nations are anticipated to skyrocket, end up at 27% for Japan, just over 25% for Sweden, and around 24% for America.
In the near future, Japan will have to bear the heaviest weight of old population among the given countries, compared to lightest one for the North American nation.
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IELTS Part I Line Graph
Requirement: The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
My writing:
The line graph given illustrates the percentage of elderly people living in Japan, Sweden and USA from 1940, with predictions up to 2040.
Overall, the figures for all three nations increased throughout the time and are expected to follow this trend in the future, despite having some fluctuations. Moreover, in 2040, the number of population aged 65 and over living in the Asian country will take the place of the USA and become the highest among those territories.
In 1940, only 5% of the Japanese residents were seniors, compared to roughly 7% in Sweden and the highest, nearly 10% in the USA. From that year until now, 2019, the statistics represented an upward trend, although there were some fluctuations, to 8%, 20% and just below 15%, respectively. With the upcoming years of 2020 toward 2040, senior citizens rates in all nations are anticipated to skyrocket and end up at 27% for Japan, just over 25% for Sweden, and around 24% for America.
In the near future, Japan will have to bear the heaviest burden of an aged population among the given countries, compared to the lightest one for North America.
(189 words / 150 words)
Some nice work, good layout and plenty of information. I think you should have made more of the detail, so "Japan showed a slight decline from 1940 to 1960 where it remained constant until 1980 when it started to climb again before the dramatic increase predicted for the early 2030's"
There were very few corrections needed and you used a good range of vocabulary.
Best wishes
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