walking in the street I went outside with my cousins this afternoon, there were a lot of people in the street. The weather is nice , we walked a lot. it was fun with them .

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Walking in the street

I went outside with my cousins this afternoon.* There were a lot of people in the street. The weather is was nice, so ** we walked a lot. It was fun to be with them***.

Tippi, keep it up. Nice work. You did a good job inserting a space after the period (句号) and comma (逗号). But you shouldn't insert a space BEFORE period or comma. So instead of "nice , " ("nice[space],[space]") you should type "nice, " ("nice,[space]"). And at the end of your essay, instead of "with them ." you should type "with them."

* I split your first sentence into two smaller sentences. Each sentence now has one verb phrase ("I went" and "there were"), so each is a complete sentence.

** I changed "weather is nice" to "weather was nice" in order to keep it in the past tense, so it would be consistent with "we walked"。 I also added the word "so" to show that you walked a lot because the weather was nice.

*** It's better to include a verb, either "It was fun to be with them" or ”It was fun being with them" or "I had fun with them."

If you have any questions, please ask me.

I went outside with my cousins this afternoon, there were a lot of people in the street. The weather was prefect , we walked long time and we enjoyed from walking.

thanks a lot~

the weather was nice

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