Today's Diary I had been playing soccer for 10 years. However, when I entered a college, I quit soccer and started futsal. Futsal is similar to soccer, but these are a little bit different sports. I w

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Today's Diary I had been playing soccer for 10 years. However, when I entered a college, I quit soccer and started futsal. Futsal is similar to soccer, but these are a little bit different sports. I was a member of futsal team, but I quit when I turned into sophomore year. One reason was that I realized how much money and time did I waste when I was a freshman. I was into hanging out with my friends, so I didn't attend classes and then I couldn't get degrees. And I realized I how rude I was. In spite of the fact that my parents work so hard in order to pay large amount of tuition fees, I couldn't make up their efforts. So, I quit and then began studying again. I've been studying English ever since then and reading a lot of books. I went to Minnesota, USA this summer to study English and experience foreign culture. I went to Cambodia to help local kids and interact with them. The path that I followed was absolutely correct I promise. It was hard for me because I felt comfortable at that time. However, I learned how important to exit the comfortable area and then try to get into a difficult path. It was really tough and actually, I felt uncomfortable about my situation many times. However, I was able to achieve something important. For me, that was English skills. I studied English a lot to get an intern's job. And I did! I'll keep it up and choose a tough path, not an easy one to grow up.

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Today's Diary

I had been playing soccer for 10 years. However, when I entered a college, I quit soccer and started futsal. Futsal is similar to soccer, but these sports are a little bit different sports. I was a member of the futsal team, but I quit when I turned into began my sophomore year. One reason was that I realized how much money and time did I was wasting when I was a freshman. I was into hanging out with my friends, so I didn't attend classes and then I couldn't get complete my degrees. And I realized I how rude I was. In spite of the fact that my parents worked so hard in order to pay the high large amount of tuition fees, I couldn't make up repay their efforts. So, I quit and then began studying again. I've been studying English ever since then and have been reading a lot of books. I went to Minnesota, USA, this summer to study English and experience foreign culture. I went to Cambodia to help local kids and interact with them. The path that I followed was absolutely correct—I promise. It was hard for me because I felt comfortable at that time. However, I learned how important it is to exit the your comfortable zone area and then try to get into take/follow/pursue a difficult path. It was really tough and actually, I felt uncomfortable about my situation many times. However, I was able to achieve something important. For me, that was English skills. I studied English a lot to get an intern's job. And I did! I'll keep it up and choose a tough path, not an easy one to grow up.

Notes:

"And I realized I how rude I was."

It is really hard to see that I struck-through the I, so I wanted to mention this.

"comfort area"

English has a phrase for this, it's called "comfort zone" :) https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Comfort_zone

During competitions, my coach used to yell "Get out of your comfort zone!" to us.

"high tuition"

In Japanese the word 高い means "tall" and "expensive". In English it is similar, we use "high" to describe a "high price" rather than "large".

"The path that I followed was absolutely correct—I promise."

The em dash (—) is the most versatile punctuation mark in the English language. When in doubt, try to use an em dash. No one knows exactly when it is correct to use an em dash and when it isn't, so even if you use it incorrectly no one will know.

" It was really tough and actually, I felt uncomfortable about my situation many times."

It is really hard to see, but I struck-through the comma. Many people try to use the comma to indicate a pause in speaking, but that is not grammatical.

Good job, this was overall well written :)

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