Formal English Check: Just One Sentence!
Is this sentence correct?
"The interested party has the right to obtain the erasure (only when not illegal) and the blocking of data processed in violation of the law, including those data which do not need to be kept for the purposes for which the data were collected or subsequently processed."
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Formal English Check: Just One Sentence!
Is this sentence correct?"The interested party has the right to request the erasure/deletion (in cases when it is not illegal to do so) and the blocking of data processed in violation of the law, including data which does not need to be kept for the purposes for which the data was collected or subsequently processed."
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This might sound more natural:
"The interested party has the right to obtain the erasure (only when not illegal) and the blocking of data processed in violation of the law, including the data which does not need to be kept for the purposes of which the data was collected or subsequently processed."0
I see, thanks for the hint!!
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This is legal wording relating to the GDPR, and you should really get the opinion of an English speaking lawyer specialising in this area. I can see no grammatical errors at all in your version - which does not mean it is correct law!
This might help you https://ico.org.uk/for-organisations/guide-to-data-protection/guide-to-law-enforcement-processing/individual-rights/the-right-to-erasure-and-the-right-to-restriction/
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