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What is medical professionalism? Medical professionalism is most important things of the concept that doctors must have. For a long time, many people have been pursuing what it is. I considered it in all its aspects. My idea is as shown below. First of all, I divided “medical professionalism” into “medical” and “professionalism” and considered how we should behave for each term. First, I’ll give my opinion on “medical”. “Medical”, that is, a healer has to have not only medical knowledge to cure patient’s body, but also consideration to other people to cure patient’s hearts. Of course, it is important for healers to cure patient’s body, but I think consideration to other people is as important as it. Even if patient’s body is cured, they may not be completely satisfied if we are unkind to them. Because, they can’t believe that their disease has been cured due to vulnerable relationship between patient and doctor. So, doctors must build trust with patients to get them to consent to treatment. Next, I’ll give my opinion on “professionalism”. I think that professions should contribute to society. The job description of doctor, lawyer, pilot and so on are too difficult for normal people to understand. Besides, they are essential for our lives. So, in regard to such jobs, people have to rely on professions. In other words, if professions didn’t work for the society, it would fall into disorder immediately. From these fact, it is duty that professions contribute to the society. Then, to be specific, what should professions do? I think that it is important to constantly renew knowledge and study in order to gain trust from the society. If each professional honors skills with responsibility for vocation, it is possible to build a good relationship of trust and obligation by gaining the trust of the general public. Putting two term’s interpretations together, we can see what medical professionalism is. The conclusion is as follows. For all doctors, being trusted from the society is the most important, which is gradually build up by consideration to patients for daily practice and very trained medical skills. So, I think the most important factor to become a medical professional is to build good relationships with patients and society.

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Putting my interpretation of the two terms’s interpretations together, we can see it becomes clear what medical professionalism is. The conclusion is as follows. For all doctors, having being  a trusting relationship with from society at large is the most important fundamental, which and this is gradually built up by developing good relationships with their patients for in daily practice and as well as very trained practising medicine with skill and expertise. So In conclusion, I think the most important factor to becoming a medical professional is to build good relationships with patients and thus with society.



The job description of doctor, lawyer, pilot and so on are too difficult for normal people to understand. - I'm sure you didn't intend it, but this sentence sounds haughty and demeaning towards anybody who isn't in a special profession! I changed it a bit to make it sound more natural.


Also, I crossed out a couple of sentences which I felt were re-wording the previous sentence, and were unnecessary to developing your thesis.


Good luck!

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I'm sorry Naotara, but the only way that I could add my correction was by splitting it into parts. Please read from the bottom of the page first!
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Next, I’ll give my opinion on the term professionalism. I think that professions should contribute to society. The job description of Such jobs as doctors, lawyers, pilots and so on require highly specialised knowledge and expertise are too difficult for normal people to understand. Besides And yet, they are essential for our lives. So, in regard to such jobs, people have to rely on professions. In other words, If professions didn’t work for the society Were it not for the contribution of these highly trained professionals, societies would fall into disorder immediately. From these fact It then follows that, it is the duty that of professionals to contribute to their society. Then, to be So, specifically, what should professions do how should professionals contribute? I think that it is important to that they study to constantly renew their knowledge and study in order to gain trust from their society. If each professional honors skills with responsibility for vocation, it is possible to build a good relationship of trust and obligation by gaining the trust of the general public. 


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First of all, I divided medical professionalism into it's two constituent parts medical and professionalism and considered how we a doctor should behave act in accordance to for each term separately. 
First, I’ll give my opinion on the term medical. The Medical practitioner is a healer who has to have not only must have medical knowledge expertise to cure a patient’s body, but also the ability to consideration to understand and empathise with other people to the effect of overcoming the grief in a patient’s heart. Of course, it is important for healers to cure patient’s body, but I think consideration to other people is as important as it I think that these two aspects of the medical practice are of equal importance. Even if a patient’s body is cured, they may not be completely satisfied if we are their doctor was unkind to them; the patient can’t believe that their disease has been cured due to the vulnerable poor relationship between patient and they had with their doctor. So, doctors must build trust with patients to get them to consent to have faith in the treatment. 

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What is medical professionalism?

Medical professionalism is the most important things of the concept that doctors must have for a doctor to understand. For a long time, many people have been pursuing the question of what exactly it this concept is entails. In coming to my own conclusions, I considered it in all its aspects. My idea is as shown below. 

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