Hi, Everyone! Please correct my essay 4. Thank you!!!
Nowadays more and more people concerned about health. They go to gum, do fitness, yoga, swimming, and other healthy things. We live in the time too much machine, manufacture, and pollution environment. So it's very important to care about health. It's important to eat good food, do exercise and go to a doctor for doing tests and preventing disease.
People should have more rest and don't nervous. They are said every day walking on air to promote improving health.
As for me, I like sports! I'm sporting girl))) I am doing stretching, yoga, love walking on the forest and cycling in summer. In winter my absolute love is snowboarding. I was in mounting is call Yralskie mountains. I also want to try surfing, it's my dream.
Thanks that you read my notice :) Good day!
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Hi, Everyone! Please correct my essay 4. Thank you!!!
Nowadays more and more people concerned about health. They go to the gym, do fitness, yoga, swimming, and other healthy things. We live in the time of too many machines, manufactures, and polluted environment. So it's very important to care about your health. It's important to eat good food, do exercise and go to a doctor for doing tests and preventing disease.People should have more rest and don't be nervous. They are said every day walking on air to promote improving health. Advice: They say that walking outside in the air will promote one's health.
As for me, I like sports! I'm a sports girl. I am doing stretching, doing yoga, and I love walking in the forest and cycling in the summer. In the winter, my absolute love is snowboarding. I was in the mountains called Yralskie mountains. I also want to try surfing, it's my dream.
Thanks that you for reading my notice :) Good day!
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Hello, here’s my correction, in yellow the correct version and in blue some useful comments. Feel free to ask any questions;)
Nowadays more and more people concerned about health.
They go to gum gym to do fitness, yoga, swimming, and other healthy things activities / things good for health.
We live in the time The time we live in is full of too much many machines, manufacture, and pollution environment polluted environment or environment pollution.
So it's very important to care about health.
It's important to eat good food, do exercises and go to a doctor for doing tests and preventing disease see a doctor for a check-up and to prevent any disease.
*** you use twice “important”, it’s correct but you can also use synonyms, so it won’t sound repetitive :) for example: crucial, essential, necessary, imperative… and so on ( it’s just a suggestion)
People should have more rest and don't be nervous.
They are said say, every day walking on in the fresh air to promote helps improving health.
As for me, I like sports! I'm sporting a sports/ sporty/ athletic girl)))
In summer I am doing stretching, yoga, love walking on in the forest and cycling in summer.
In winter my absolute love is snowboarding.
I was in mounting is call mountains called Yralskie Ural mountains (название гор или мест можно проверять в википедии;)).
I also want to try surfing, it's my dream.
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Hello, Nikolai. I went to Sky center Bannoe, Abzakovo, Mratkino and Asha last year.
The Belaya mountain is cool!
I wish you an amazing trip.
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Hi. where are you went snowboarding? I am going to Belaya mountain with my wife next weekend. Usually I ride in the forest near the city.
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