The importance of art in my life
I´ve always been blowed away by the fact of how our brians Works and how it develops relation according to what correct and incorrect is. It accounts what is bauty indeed.
It is an ardue process achieve a complete understanding of relationship/friendship or even any else relation beetween humans being. For those who find an extreme difficult tap into with the idea of getting new friends or meeting new people (sometime even considered as a challange). Reconecting with basic stuff like painting, drawing, playing some instrument or even writting can be considering as a way of conexión to understand life and express it in a healthy way.
Sometimes it is the only thing you have to allay those emotions wich overwehlmed and those ideas you wich come up ressentlesly into your mind.
Those stuff wich you can not express with words but express them through music or drawing. So we can find with ourselves instead of falling into an utter state of grieflessness.
Unexpectedely I realised that is time to accept those queer and wacky feelings and thoughts. Despite the fact of getting ride of them or trying to disguise them would be easier but they amend day by day. So it is usless.
Once I read a quote from Placebo´s Singer who said:
- "When people Heard the Word "beatutiful", they expected something to be pretty. And for me that´s not always necessarily the case".
Why is it so difficult recognise that so? I completely agree with it. Secluded and intrincated thought are where the truly beauty takes place.
Instead of admit them we just try to be able to fit with society impose.
I reckon that if most people would accept that, world relationships would be simplier and less complicated.
People tend make up stories most of the time, or even give false opinions just to be icluded in certain groups. They are not trying to take you in, they are just looking for a mechanism to make the society Works. But the fact is that those mechanisms are not literrally, they always contain second meanings, wich are not easy to understand.
To be inmerse in a world where everything is like a puzzle can be desvastated and tired.
At least in art some kind of realese can be found, with no questions or asking for explanations.
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Unexpectedely I realized that is time to accept those queer (strange) and wacky feelings and thoughts. Despite the fact of getting ride of them or trying to disguise them would be easier but they amend (change) day by day. So it is useless.Once I read a quote from Placebo´s Singer who said:
- "When people Heard the Word "beatutiful", they expected something to be pretty. And for me that´s not always necessarily the case".
Why is it so difficult recognise that so (to recognize that)? I completely agree with it. Secluded and intrincated (intricate) thoughts are where the truly (true) beauty takes place.
Instead of admit (accepting) them we just try to be able to fit within society impose.
I reckon that if most people would accept that, world relationships would be simplier and less complicated (more simple and less complicated mean the same thing).
People tend to make up stories most of the time, or even give false opinions just to be included in certain groups. They are not trying to take you in, they are just looking for a mechanism to make the society works. But the fact is that those mechanisms are not literrally (literal), they always contain second meanings, which are not easy to understand.
To be inmerse (immersed) in a world where everything is like a puzzle can be desvastated (devastating) and tired.
At least in art some kind of realese (release) can be found, with no questions or asking (need) for explanations.
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Great job, and most of these corrections are just for flow, and to make it sound smoother, but when it is an artistic piece like this, it is difficult to know what to change because I can tell you put a lot of emotion into it.
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Sometimes it is the only thing you have to allay those emotions which overwhelm you and those ideas you which come up relentlessly into your mind.
Those That stuff which you can not express with words but can express them through music or drawing. So we can find ______ (it seems like a word is missing here. Peace?) with (or "within") ourselves instead of falling into an utter state of grieflessness hopelessness / despair.
Unexpectedly I realised that it is time to accept those queer and wacky feelings and thoughts, despite the fact of that getting ride of them or trying to disguise them would be easier. But they amend grow/multiply/regenerate day by day, so it is useless.
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Yay, these two paragraphs were much easier to edit!
I will still need to edit the final two paragraphs in a separate entry. Italki has a 5000 character limit, but those characters get depleted extra quickly whenever special font styles or colors are used in the corrections.
"Stuff" is a mass noun -- an uncountable noun. So we can say "This stuff, that stuff, the stuff", but we can't say "these stuff, those stuff." The word "things" seems like it would be the same as stuff -- but "things" has a singular form "this thing, that thing, the thing" and a plural form "these things, those things, the things." So, you have two choices for your sentence: "Those things which you cannot express..." or "That stuff which you cannot express..."
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Lujan, I've written corrections for just two paragraphs because I
had questions about what meaning you intended with some of the
sentences. I wish I could give simple advice about correct grammar, but
it was difficult for me to do when I wasn't sure if I understood the
ideas correctly. I hope what I have written will be useful to you.
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The importance of art in my life
I´ve always been blowed blown away by the fact of how way our brains works and how it they develops relationships according to what is correct and incorrect is. It accounts what is beauty indeed. (Maybe "It is a thing of beauty indeed." ?)It is an arduous process to achieve a complete understanding of relationship/friendship (did you want both ideas: "romantic relationships, friendships" or just one idea "friendships"?) or even any else other relationship between humans beings.
For those who find an extreme difficult tap into with the idea of getting new friends or meeting new people (sometime even considered as a challange). Hmmm...I'm not sure what to do with this sentence. Perhaps: "For those who find it extremely difficult to think about how to get new friends or meet new people, _______________ . (What would the second half of that sentence be? What do those people do? Or what is the advice for them?) Or maybe: "For those who find it extremely difficult to tap into_________ with the idea of getting new friends or meeting new people, ____________" (there would need to be a second half to this sentence). Or another possibility: "Some people find it extremely difficult to tap into _________ with the idea of getting new friends or meeting new people (sometimes they even considered it a challenge)."
Reconnecting with basic stuff like painting, drawing, playing some instrument or even writing can be considered as a way of conexión connection to understand life and express it in a healthy way.
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"Blow" has irregular verb conjugations: past tense = "blew", past participle = "blown" (have blown). You can find some similar verbs in "group 7" @ https://mrseugeniablog.files.wordpress.com/2016/05/irregular-verbs-mnemonic-rhyming-groups-2012.pdf
A fact is one small, specific piece of information. The word "fact" cannot be used for something more complex (for example, a process). Some alternatives for "by the fact of how our brains work" are "by the way our brains work", "by information/research about how our brains work" or "by our/scientists' understanding of how our brains work."
Another option for the first sentence: "I've always been blown away by the way the human brain works and how it develops relationships according to what is correct and incorrect." (Here I changed "our brains" to "the human brain" to have a singular subject which will match your use of the singular with "it" and "develops").
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