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A golden clock He enters the home ,violently pushing the doors ,screaming joyfully in search for his grandpa. It didn't take him long to reach for him sitting beside a library, and reading a book as usual . The boy said : " grandpa ,grandpa, I found it, I found it, come to see". The old man looked at him with a large smile, and a face full of white hair, OK Cima I'm coming. When the old man stepped out of the house, he was surprised to see the boy standing by a yellow golden grand clock partially covered with dirt. He approached the clock in slow steps and the boy with wide opened eyes observed his grandpa while holding it with both hands and taking it to the basement.

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Hi Housaam,

Sounds like a great story.  I find myself wanting to read the rest of it!  Here's some corrections.  Hope they are helpful.

Ben



A golden clock

He enters entered (because the rest of your story is past tense this sentence needs to be unless you are going to clearly shift tenses.) the home   violently pushing the doors  and screaming joyfully in search of his grandpa.
It didn't take him long to reach  find for him sitting beside a library (it should be "in the library" or beside a bookshelf; in English a Library is a room or a building) and reading a book as usual .
The boy said : " grandpa ,grandpa, I found it, I found it, come and see".
The old man looked at him with a large smile  and a face full of white hair, OK Cima I'm coming.
When the old man stepped out of the house, he was surprised to see the boy standing by a yellow golden grandfather clock (or a yellowish gold grandfather clock or a grand, yellow-gold clock) partially covered with dirt.
He approached the clock in slow steps and the boy with wide opened eyes observed watched as his grandpa, while holding it with both hands, and taking took it to the basement.

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