Promotion letter || Help ||
Good friends,
I have to write a letter to propose a promotion . Could you help me by correcting or adding on the following paragraph.
He has been running “hot kitchen” and has been doing a great job throughout his service.
He showed his comprehension of the art of cooking skillfully and his talent and capability of managing the daily operations in the kitchen in terms of planning menus, ordering ingredients and equipment, and managing the inventory.
Paul works exceptionally well under pressure and is a gifted multi-tasker. He is involved in the preparations of high-profile Events country-wide.
Therefore, this promotion would be a natural progression for his career as he proved to be worth assist to….
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Promotion letter || Help ||
Good friends,I have to write a letter to propose a promotion . Could you help me by correcting or adding on the following paragraph.
He has been running directing/leading “Hot Kitchen” and has been doing a great phenomenal/impressive job throughout his service (You may want to add how long he has been there: He has been running "Hot Kitchen" for 2 years/since September).
He showed has consistently demonstrated his comprehension (you can also use "understanding") of the high art of cooking. skillfully and His culinary talents and ability to competently manage the daily operations in of the kitchen (i.e. in terms of planning menus, ordering ingredients and equipment, and efficiently managing the inventory) are critical assets to the economic success of this restaurant (This is not a grammatical change but is something that may help to emphasize the merits of the promotion).
Paul works exceptionally well under pressure and is a gifted multi-tasker (rather than multi-tasker, I suggest using something such as "leader" or "head chef/manager").. He is involved integral in the preparations of high-profile events country-wide (which are critical to the success/reputation of the Hot Kitchen"--this is just a suggestion. You must determine if it is justifiable).
Therefore, this promotion would be a natural progression for his career as he proven to be a profitable/integral asset to d to be worth assist to….
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