Please, Could anyone check this little paragraph for me?? thank you so much! This is part of my motivation letter, although I spent a lot of time writing it, it still seems not quite good, especially the coherence and consistency of the sentence, I sure it will be so much better if you could help me with it, Thanks! The idea of creating something new and different is what drives me, and it seems to me that your program is my next starting point. The more students’ work I saw, the more excited I was, and the more I realized how much I could and need to improve in design. I always remind myself that I am just a toddler in this field, and there is endless for me to learn. But with my skills, understanding, and experiences, I believe I am ready to take my next step in your university I am currently designing an innovative tool for Haier with two designers at IDEO, and it opens my eyes to a professional and collaborative design process. The project requires a large amount of research and Identifying problems, and together we found opportunities and new ideas through many brainstorming and discussions. However, it is much complicated than I thought, we must discuss with Haier back and forth, and it taught me not only about the business side of things like manufacturing and managing costs, but also how to be creative while following the guideline and structural requirement. We are in the 2D-design stage right now, and I am putting skills in good use.