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Theoretical and Practical skills Practicing sport brings about many benefits in terms of health and self-confidence. Which begs the question: how can the governments incentivize fitness in schools?. Firstly, an educational initiative, aimed at showing the positive effects of doing sport activities, might bring about the desired effect. Schools should introduce, beside a practical class of physical education, a theoretical one, where professional athletes and professors would explain how to live a healthy lifestyle, explaining its importance. Indeed, people who regularly practice sports benefit from more energy, health, wake up revitalized, are more happy and these effects are correlated with a better job performance. In addition, this initiative should introduce to the youth the negative effects of a sedentary lifestyle, and its association with obesity. An alternative could be an improvement of the perception of sports. Contrary to the popular view conveyed by American movies, where athletes are the most popular in the school, the reality is that many teenagers claim that sports are not cool. This result might be obtaining introducing a greater variety of sports. When students have the choice to try something new, they would inevitably feel more incentivized, or at least curious to pursue a more active lifestyle. In my opinion, an educational initiative would be the most viable starting point. In the future, fitness influencers could be employed with the purpose of promoting sports as they are the most effective means. In fact, influencers are recognized as important figures in our fast-paced society, thus, why not exploiting them?.

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Theoretical and Practical Skills

Practicing sport brings about many benefits in terms of health and self-confidence. Which begs the question: how can the governments incentivize fitness in schools?.
<Firstly>/One possibility is that an educational initiative, aimed at showing the <positive effects>/benefits of taking part in sports/of exercising activities, might bring about the desired effect. Schools should introduce, besides a practical class of physical education, a theoretical one, where in which professional athletes and professors would explain how to live a healthy lifestyle and its importance. Indeed, people who regularly practice sports benefit from more energy, are healthier, wake up revitalized, and are happier, and these effects are correlated with a <better job performance>/greater professional performance. In addition, this initiative should to the youth  introduce the negative effects of a sedentary lifestyle to the youth, <and>/as well as its association with obesity.
An alternative could be an improvement of the perception of sports. Contrary to the popular view conveyed by American movies, where athletes are the most popular in the school, the reality is that many teenagers claim that sports are not cool. This result might be obtained by introducing a greater variety of sports. When students have the choice an opportunity to try something new, they would inevitably <feel more>/be incentivized, or at least curious to <pursue>/try a more active lifestyle.
In my opinion, an educational initiative would be the most viable starting point. In the future, fitness influencers could be employed <with the purpose of>/and tasked with promoting sports, as they are the most effective means to encourage more activity amongst the population. In fact, influencers are recognized as important figures in our fast-paced society, thus, why not exploiting them?.

Congratulations Giulia for a great text! Your English is really excellent. I've made corrections in yellow highlight and suggestions for how to rephrase things in green. For the suggestions, the <> enclose the original phrase the suggestion would replace. I made quite a few changes but please don't get disencouraged by the amount; I was just being hypercritical because I don't often see texts that are so well written. Keep up the good work! 
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Theoretical and Practical skills

Practicing sport brings about many benefits in terms of health and self-confidence. Which begs raises the question: how can the governments incentivize fitness in schools?.
Firstly, an educational initiative , aimed at showing the positive effects of doing sport activities, might bring about the desired effect. Schools should introduce, beside In addition to a practical class of physical education, schools should have a theoretical one, where professional athletes and professors would explain teach students how to live a healthy lifestyle, explaining and explain its importance. Indeed, people who regularly practice sports benefit from more energy, and health, wake up revitalized, are more happy, and these effects are correlated with a better job performance. In addition, this initiative should introduce to the youth the negative effects of a sedentary lifestyle, and its association with obesity.
An alternative goal could be an improvement of the perception of sports. Contrary to the popular view conveyed by American movies, where athletes are the most popular in the school, the reality is that many teenagers claim that sports are not cool. This result might be obtaining introducing a greater variety of sports. When students have the choice to try something new, they would inevitably might feel more incentivized, or at least curious to pursue a more active lifestyle, or at least more curious about it.
In my opinion, an educational initiative would be the most viable starting point. In the future, fitness influencers could be employed with the purpose of promoting sports as they are the most effective means. In fact, influencers are recognized as important figures in our fast-paced society, thus, why not exploiting them?.


Your English is very good! A lot of my corrections were not because of actual mistakes, but were rather to help you sound more natural.

"Begs the question" is actually a term from logic which means that someone made an argument in which one of their premises is or depends upon the very conclusion which they are trying to reach! In other words, a circular argument. So it's not right to use it to mean raising a question...However, a lot of native speakers make this same mistake!

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