The story of Agafia (part 2)
In 1978 the family was discovered by a group of geologists who were exploring over the region in an helicopter. They first spotted patches of land in the middle of the forest, and they were very surprised because they thought that nobody could live in that region. The first meeting and communicaton was not easy because the language they talked was slightly different from the russian language.
In 1980, the Russian government offered Agafia a tour to discover the country. For the first time she saw cars, roads, towns, and everything about the modern life, but she did not like it; so she chose to return where she had grown up, a peaceful place, away from the pollution of the large cities.
In 1981, one of the geologist settled down in the Taiga and became Agafia’s neighbour. Sometimes he helped her , but most of the time she managed to do everything by herself.
Agafia's days are always busy, because hard work is something important and mandatory for Old believers. She fishes in the river, cuts the wood for the fire, grows her vegetables, mainly potatoes, but also onions, peas, carrots and turnips, she prepares her meals and she also spends four or five hours every day to pray...
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Excellent writing - this is almost like it was written by a native speaker. The changes I made are very minor.
The story of Agafia (part 2)
In 1978, the family was discovered by a group of geologists who were exploring the region by helicopter. They first spotted patches of land in the middle of the forest, and they were very surprised because they thought that nobody could live in that region. The first meeting and initial communicaton was not easy because the language they talked spoke was slightly different from the russian language standard russian.In 1980, the Russian government offered Agafia a tour to discover the country. For the first time she saw cars, roads, towns, and everything about the modern life the modern way of life, but she did not like it; so she chose to return to where she had grown up, a peaceful place, away from the pollution of the large cities.
In 1981, one of the geologists settled down in the Taiga and became Agafia’s neighbour. Sometimes he helped her, but most of the time she managed to do everything by herself.
Agafia's days are always busy, because hard work is something important and mandatory for Old Believers. She fishes in the river, cuts the wood for the fire chops the firewood, grows her own vegetables, mainly potatoes, but also onions, peas, carrots and turnips. She prepares her meals and she also spends four or five hours every day to pray... praying...
NOTES:
exploring over the region in an helicopter - We already know they are "over" the region if they are exploring AND in a helicopter. I don't think you need to say over because it is implied by the context.
Old believers: if you capitalize "Old" you should also capitalize "Believers" - Old Believers. By capitalizing, you a referencing a specific group by name who are known as "Old Believers", rather than using it as a descriptive term to describe someone who is old and believes.
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