The story of Agafia
In order to avoid persecution, the Lykov family ran away to the deep Siberian wilderness in 1937. They belonged to a branch of the Orthodox church called : The old believers. If they had not fled, they could have been killed because of their beliefs. They settled in a very remote place, by the side of a river in the forest, in a cold and unwelcoming place where the temperature can reach minus 40 in winter. Agafia, the youngest daughter was born in 1943, she had 2 older brothers and one sister, but now she is the only one still alive.
The family managed labouriously to survive on its own. They were self-sufficient, but they did not always eat their fill when crops were bad. The mother even died of starvation in 1961...
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This is very good writing at a very high level. The changes I made were very minor. Great work!
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The story of Agafia
In order to avoid persecution, the Lykov family ran away to the deep Siberian wilderness in 1937. They belonged to a branch of the Orthodox church called "The old believers." If they had not fled, they could have been killed because of their beliefs. They settled in a very remote place, by the side of a river in the forest. The place was cold and unwelcoming, where the temperature could reach minus 40 in winter. Agafia, the youngest daughter was born in 1943. She had 2 older brothers and one sister, but now she is the only one still alive.The family managed labouriously to survive on its own. They were self-sufficient, but they did not always eat their fill when crops were bad (when the crops failed). The mother even died of starvation in 1961...
Other suggested changes (you are correct, I think this may be a more natural way to say it)
The family managed labouriously to survive on its own = The family worked hard to survive on their own.
...but they did not always eat their fill when crops were bad...=...but they did not always have enough to eat when crops were bad
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In order to avoid persecution, the Lykov family ran away to the deep Siberian wilderness in 1937. They belonged to a branch of the Orthodox church called "The Old Believers". If they had not fled, they would have been killed because of their beliefs. They settled in a remote area, by the side of a river in the forest, in a cold and unwelcoming place where the temperature can reach minus 40 in winter. Agafia, the youngest daughter was born in 1943. She had 2 older brothers and one sister, but now she is the only one still alive. The family managed labouriously to survive on its own. They were self-sufficient, but they did not always eat their fill when crops were bad. The mother even died of starvation in 1961...
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I would appreciate corrections and alterations when needed, thank you.
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