School holidays in Germany. Part 2. Preparation
Please, help me to correct my writing. I want to describe one of my vacations in a few notebooks, I think it will be from 4 to 5 writings. The first one is here - https://www.italki.com/notebook/5647274/entry/951955.
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When everything was decided, we only had to prepare for the trip. First of all, we bought avia-tickets and booked a hotel. As we planned to ride to two different places, each of them were located about 100 km from Munchen, we decided to rent a car. To make sure that there would be a free car for us when we would be landed, we booked the car in advance. In addition, we bought tickets to LegoLand. Tickets to Neuschwanstein Castle could not be bought online. The only possibility was to book tickets and then bought them out at the ticket office on the spot and we had done that way.
Eventually, all things were arranged and we were ready for the trip. It remained to wait for spring when the journey would be to take place.
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School holidays in Germany. Part 2. Preparation
Please, help me to correct my writing. I want to describe one of my vacations in a few notebooks, I think it will be from 4 to 5 writings. The first one is here - https://www.italki.com/notebook/5647274/entry/951955.====
WhenOnce everything was decided, we only had toall we had to do was prepare for the trip. First of all, we bought our avia-tickets and booked a hotel. As we planned to ridego to two different places and both each of them were located about 100 km from Munchen,Munich we decided to rent a car. To make sure that there would be a free car available for us when we would be landed, we booked carone in advance. In addition(Grammatically it's right but it's too formal for the context) We also bought tickets to Disneyland. We couldn't buy tickets to Neuschwanstein Castle could not be bought online（grammatically correct but too formal). The only possibility was to book tickets and then bought them out at the ticket office on the spot and we had done that way.(I'm not sure what you mean by this sentence, maybe you could write it in German)
Eventually, all things wereeverything was arranged and we were ready for the trip. It remained to wait for spring when the journey would be to take place.All we had to do was wait for spring when we would go on the trip.
In addition
could not be bought online
located
If you use in addition, located, or the passive like this it sounds very formal and not right for a diary.
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