My Personal Profile
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I was born and raised in kouhdasht, When I started high school I moved to Khorramabad for study at a boarding school called "Imam jafar" that was in a special area of the city called "Koroush" . At first year of high school I had a very nice and interesting Physics teacher that encouraged me to become a Physician!! and now I am a mechanical engineer just because of physic!! I am working for big company named "L.O.R.C" for 8 years and It's located in Lavan Island at the south of Iran in Persian Golf. These days I am the head of Machinery Maintenance Office. I can be a specialist of Rotary machine like turbine, compressors, pumps ,etc. Machinery is one of the most important offices at each Refinery company. My job is really resposibilities and it's hard to work more years like this, Actually It's took my energy very much but It's fine because my job is full of new phenomena and unsolved issues.
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My job is has really responsibilities and it's hard to work more for many years like this. Actually It's took taken a great deal of {or: much of} my energy very much but it's fine because my job is full of new phenomena experiences [5] and unsolved issues.
5. Phenomena would be things like lightning. In this case, you're talking about encountering problems that you've never seen before, so "experiences" is more appropriate.
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My Personal Profile: Would you please correct sentences??
I was born and raised in Kouhdasht. When I started high school, I moved to Khorramabad for to study at a boarding school called "Imam jafar" that was in a special area of the city called "Koroush". At During my first year of high school, I had a very nice and interesting Physics teacher that who encouraged me to become a Physician! physicist! [1] and now I am a mechanical engineer just because of physics! I am have been working for big company named "L.O.R.C" for 8 eight [2] years and it's located in Lavan Island at in the south of Iran in the Persian Gulf. These days, I am the head of Machinery Maintenance Office. I can be am a specialist [3] of rotary machines like turbines, compressors, pumps, etc. Machinery is one of the most important offices departments/functions [4] at each every refinery company.1. A physician is a medical doctor. A person who studied Physics is a physicist.
2. Numbers up to ten are written out.
3. "Can be" would mean that you have the potential of becoming a specialist, but you are not.
4. "Office" is associated with administrative work. In this case, "department" is more appropriate.
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