The Sunset
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The moment where I feel
I'm not permanent in this world.
Did you see, my dear?
The scarlet hovering wall
Awaiting every piece
On this earth to suck up!
Lo, the end is finally here!
But as we hope for tomorrow,
Nay, my dear, it's not
Truly the end yet.
But for sure, someday,
It will take us up to an abode
Where there's never ending
(no, not of fairytale),
But of everlasting life with God.
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Please, help me correct my English.
Thank you!
There is a moment when I feel
I'm not permanent in this world
Did you see, my dear?
The scarlet hovering wall
Awaiting every piece
On this earth to suck up!
Lo, the end is finally here!
But as we hope for tomorrow,
Nay, my dear, it's not
Truly the end yet.
But for sure, someday,
It will take us up to an abode
Where there's never ending
(no, not of fairytale),
But of everlasting life with God.
(Not sure what you mean the last two lines of the first stanza, "Awaiting every piece/On this earth to suck up!" So I don't know how to word it better, but lovely poem!)
Thank you!
There is a moment when I feel
I'm not permanent in this world
Did you see, my dear?
The scarlet hovering wall
Awaiting every piece
On this earth to suck up!
Lo, the end is finally here!
But as we hope for tomorrow,
Nay, my dear, it's not
Truly the end yet.
But for sure, someday,
It will take us up to an abode
Where there's never ending
(no, not of fairytale),
But of everlasting life with God.
(Not sure what you mean the last two lines of the first stanza, "Awaiting every piece/On this earth to suck up!" So I don't know how to word it better, but lovely poem!)
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