I am going to write about ,  the advantages and disadvantages of mobile phones. First I will talk about the disadvantages. When using the a phone frequently the battery becomes low and too much use of the phone can hurts your eyes, Some other disadvantages are loss of communication with people, becoming overweight when they paly play on their phones too much, and maybe even increased traffic accidents. Now I will talk about the advantages. Some advantages include the speed of communication with between people, There was a lot of  enhanced communication with  between individuals,  ease of getting information extraction, and saving time and money. The mobile phone has also developed gained its the ability to enter the world of  access the Internet and online shopping and it can also be used for learning as there are many applications for education and to help students in with their studies in smartphones. Finally  To conclude, I believe that a phone must be used with care.

Hi there! I would really recommend you brush up on your punctuation rules. All punctuation must be touching the words prior -- there are no spaces before commas, periods, question marks, etc. =)