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Please modify my essay It is true that collaboration with a diverse team brought up new ideas and creations. Trying to achieve our diverse team’s goal, I experienced three things. This blog post considers these in terms of interactions, time management and showing processes. First of all, when I’ve got some reviews from the tutor and students after finished my presentation, my feeling has changed from anxious to confidence that the direction of my project went well. Namely, some students and tutors informed me that they understood what I wanted to express in terms of Anti-Modern-design, my inspiration and the process. It is essential for me to interact with the audience and people and these experiences made me feel courageous. On the other hands, I had been worried about our project wasn’t a physical collaborative work. I suggested it at our meetings but the other students didn’t accept my idea. In addition, I didn’t want to argue with them and there was a language barrier, so that finally it wasn’t achieved. To overcome this obstacle, I have decided to improve my English speaking skill intensively. Secondly, I became sure that the importance of time management. I tried to be on punctual and promise the schedule because I believe it leads trusts between people and people. Actually, some students were always delayed and I had to wait for ours instead of designing my work. Gradually the trust between us had been going down. I thought a person steal the other’s time get lost of their own trust. This story told me the importance of time management. Thirdly, I leant showing the process to design my work is legible to understand for audiences. In Japan, I had been required to be a professional and submitted result of works than the process. So firstly I was confused about it but I had been enjoying it in the end. In conclusion, this project convinced me of important awarenesses in terms of interactions, time management and showing processes. Integrating these points, I believe the contribution to a group or organization leads energetic creations.

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It is true that collaboration with a diverse team can create new ideas and creations. Trying to achieve our diverse team’s goal, I experienced three things. This blog post considers these in terms of interactions, time management and showing processes.

First of all, when I received reviews from the tutor and students after finishing/having finished my presentation, my feeling has changed from anxiousness to confidence that the direction of my project went well. Namely, some students and tutors informed me that they understood what I wanted to express in terms of Anti-Modern-design, my inspiration and the process. It is essential for me to interact with the audience and people.  These experiences made me feel courageous. On the other hands, I had been worried that our project wasn’t a physical collaborative work. I suggested this at our meetings but the other students didn’t accept my idea. In addition, I didn’t want to argue with them and there was a language barrier.  So, that idea finally it wasn’t achieved. To overcome this obstacle, I have decided to improve my English speaking skills intensively.

Secondly, I became sure of the importance of time management. I tried to be on punctual and keep my promises with the schedule because I believe those behaviors lead  to trust between people and people. Actually, some students were often delayed and I had to wait for hours instead of designing my work. Gradually the trust between us decreased/went downhill. I think when a person steals the other’s time they lose everyone's trust. This story taught me the importance of time management.

Thirdly, I learned that showing the process of designing my work is easy to understand for audiences. In Japan, I had been required to be professional and submitted the result of my work rather than the process. So initially, I was confused about it but I had been enjoyed it in the end.

In conclusion, this project convinced me of the importance of awarenesses in terms of interactions, time management and showing processes. Integrating these points, I believe the contribution to a group or organization leads energetic creations.

*** Great job!  Your writing is clear and easy to understand.  You wrote a number of complex sentences well.  Best of luck in your language learning journey.



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