short tale.
I don't remember when or how I fell down, but now I can't get up. This well is too deep, and the sun rays don't arrive here. Everything around me is obscure, and you can almost taste the anguish and despair in the air. In the distance I hear a low voice, it's a girl, and she says, "just try again".
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short tale.
I don't remember when or how I fell down, but now I can't get up. This well is too deep, and the sun's rays don't arrive here. (more fluid would be: can't reach down here). Everything around me is obscure (dark), and you can almost taste the anguish and despair in the air. In the distance I hear a low voice,. iIt's a girl, and she says, "jJust try again.".Very good English!
Sun's rays: "Arrive" is more for people or transportation. "Reach" would be a more appropriate verb for light, especially when you're talking about a dark well.
"Obscure" is used more for a topic or question that is not widely-known - dark is used for the physical absence of light.
The other corrections are mostly just punctuation. In English, we put the period inside the quotation marks.
Really good work here!
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short tale.
I don't remember when or how I fell down, but now I couldn’t get up. This wall is too deep, and the sun don't arrive here. Everything around me is obscure, and you can almost taste the anguish and despair in the air. In the distance I hear a low voice, it's a girl, and she says, "just try again".Want to progress faster?
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