Should music be something we listen to, or should we also make music?
My task is to answer this question in ~ 200 words. So, here they are:
I reckon that making music is one of great ways to have a good time and enrich life with emotions. When I was a child I hated playing piano, because my parents made me to do it, and my teacher seemed to me a total bore. One day I just rebelled and gave up the classes.
But when I became older (and smarter) I was sorry of the opportunity that I had lost, because I realized that making music is one of great ways to express your feelings and to get what we call "aesthetic pleasure". Making music also helps to become more focused on the present time, on what you're doing just now. I can watch TV while knitting, I can eat while reading, etc... But it's very difficult - I would say impossible - to be distracted while playing music. Body and mind are concentrating on what they do together at the moment of making music. This concentration is the thing that I usually lack of in my everyday life. So, I am definitely sure that making music can make people'l life better (maybe with exception of their neighbours, if soundproofing is not enough).
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Should music be something we listen to, or should we also make music?
My task is to answer this question in ~ 200 words. So, here they are:I reckon that making music is one of the great ways to have a good time and enrich life with emotion. When I was a child I hated playing piano, because my parents made me do it, and my teacher seemed to me a total bbbooorrrree. One day I just rebelled and gave up the classes.
But when I became older (and smarter) I regretted this lost opportunity, because I realized that making music is one of the great ways to express your feelings and to get what we call "aesthetic pleasure". Making music also focuses us strongly on the present time, on what we immediately do. I can watch TV while knitting, I can eat while reading, etc... But it's very difficult - I would say impossible - to be distracted while playing music. Body and mind are concentrating on what they do together at the moment of making music. This concentration is the thing that I usually lack of in my everyday life. So, I am convinced that making music can make our life better (not perhaps for our neighbours, if soundproofing is not enough).
the picture is taken from theguardian.com
very well written!
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Should music be something we listen to, or should we also make music?
My task is to answer this question in ~ 200 words. So, here they are:I reckon that making music is one of the great ways of having a good time and enriching life with emotions. When I was a child I hated playing the piano, because my parents made me to do it, and my teacher seemed a total bore to me . One day I just rebelled and gave up the classes.
But when I became older (and smarter) I was sorry about the opportunity that I had lost, because I realized that making music is one of great ways of expressing your feelings and to getting what we call "aesthetic pleasure". Making music also helps you to become more focused on the present time, on what you're doing just now. I can watch TV while knitting, I can eat while reading, etc... But it's very difficult - I would say impossible - to be distracted while playing music. Body and mind are concentrating on what they do together at the moment of making music. This concentration is the thing that I usually lack of in my everyday life. So, I am definitely sure that making music can make people’s life better (maybe with the exception of their neighbours, if soundproofing is not enough).
the picture is taken from theguardian.com
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This is very well written, but I personally don't think that "reckon" sounds natural in this circumstance. It's not incorrect, but I personally feel that "I think" instead of "I reckon" would sound more natural. :)
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No, I was asking only.
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I'm just trying to improve my vocabulary. Do you think the word "reckon" is not appropriate here? Unfortunately, I sill hardly plumb the nuances of different words ))
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