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Why American youngsters don't work anymore? There is the lowest unemployment rate in the past 16 years and employers tend to hire more seasonal workers in the summer. But, the unemployment rate only includes people who are actively looking for work and teenagers are not included in this group. The author uses some data to show that youngsters are not inclined to work in summer due to the change of priorities. Moreover, when recessions hit, teen labor participation rates plunge, but during the recovery time, there is no significant come back. There are many reasons why teens are not working. First of all, youngsters are being crowded out of the workforce by older Americans. Secondly, there are more immigrants getting the entry-level jobs, which are the main category jobs of teens. Also, nowadays the paid is extremely insufficient, compared to the past. Although some old people think young people are just getting lazier, a recent research showed that students have to spend more time on their studies because the academic loads are heavier. For example, more percentage of students are obliged to complete more courses and the level of difficulty is becoming higher. There are some advantages to getting a summer job. For example, teens can learn to manage their money, know how to deal with their bosses, and maintain a relationship with co-workers. Also, it can help the crime rate drop since students can learn how to deal with conflict.

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Overall, very good writing but a few corrections are below:

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Why American youngsters don't work anymore? (statement, word order is noun, verb OR)

Why don't American youngsters don't work anymore? (question - the word order is verb, noun)

There is the lowest unemployment rate is the lowest (OR is at its lowest) in the past 16 years and employers tend to hire more seasonal workers in the summer. But, the unemployment rate only includes people who are actively looking for work and teenagers are not included in this group.
The author uses some data to show that youngsters are not inclined to work in summer due to the change of priorities. Moreover, when recessions hit, teen labor participation rates plunge, but during the recovery time, there is no significant come back.
There are many reasons why teens are not working. First of all, youngsters are being crowded out of the workforce by older Americans. Secondly, there are more immigrants getting the entry-level jobs, which are the main category jobs of teens. Also, nowadays the paid pay is extremely insufficient (pay can be a verb or a noun, but paid is a verb, you can use it as in they are paid insufficiently), compared to the past.
Although some old people think young people are just getting lazier, a recent research showed that students have to spend more time on their studies because the academic loads are heavier. For example, more percentage of students (either more students or greater percentage of students) are obliged to complete more courses and the level of difficulty is becoming higher.
There are some advantages to getting a summer job. For example, teens can learn to manage their money, know how to deal with their bosses, and maintain a relationship with co-workers. Also, it can help the crime rate drop (OK but better: it can help lower the crime rate) since students can learn how to deal with conflict.

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