Tom's vacation.
Tom’s house has lots of roach. He is fed up because roaches are out of control. He decides to go to Hawaii, in which his aunt lives. He thinks Hawaii is really low key.
After he gets to Hawaii, he drives to his aunt’s house. He is psyched to see her and She is tickled pink to see him.
He decides to go to the beach in order to learn how to surf on the first time. He can’t stand up on the surfboard at first. But after he practices, He gets the hang of it of standing on the surfboard. He goes to the beach every day and even doesn’t think about roaches at his house. He is able to let completely let go.
After four weeks pass by, He realizes that time files when he is relaxing.
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Tom's vacation.
Tom’s house has lots of roaches. He is fed up because the roaches are out of control. He decides to go to Hawaii, where his aunt lives. He thinks Hawaii is really low key.After he gets to Hawaii, he drives to his aunt’s house. He is psyched to see her and she is tickled pink to see him.
He decides to go to the beach in order to learn how to surf on the first time [1]. He can’t stand up on the surfboard at first. But after he practices, he gets the hang of it [2]. He goes to the beach every day and doesn't even think about roaches at his house. He is able to let go completely let go [3].
After four weeks pass by, he realizes that time flies when he is relaxing.
[1] "for the first time" is the correct way of phrasing this, but I don't think this information is needed here.
[2] You can either say "gets the hang of it" or "gets the hang of standing on the surfboard." The first one is a shorter version of the second one and can be used if the context is clear.
[3] You can either say "he is able to let go completely" or "he is able to completely let go."
[4] No need to capitalize pronouns like "he" or "she," only "I."
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