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Countryside or city Everybody at some point of their life will ask themselves these questions: What is better place to live city or countryside? Which ones will bring more benefits? First at all, I think all the job opportunities that you can have in a big city as London, where you can improve your career and get a well paid job. Where every day is different and you can enjoy your life too with all the social activities that you can do and all the people all around the world that you are able to meet in a big, chaotic and busy city. On the other hand it is true that living in a big city as London has higher cost than living in a quiet countryside, where you can enjoy the time with your family and friends without living the frenetic life of the city, keeping in touch with nature without any stress from outside. In conclusion, I think that there is not a best place to live but this is a personal decision and it depends on your life achievements and your lifestyle. If you want to build a family, I would suggest that you should move to the quiet countryside where you can grow your children. However if you are a young person who wants to make a career I would suggest moving to a big and fast paced city. Then I think the important question that you need to ask from yourself is: Am I looking for a nice and relaxing life in a countryside or an exciting and always changing life?

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Countryside or city

Everybody at some point of their life, will ask themselves these (two)  questions:
What is the better place to live, the city or the countryside? Which ones will bring more benefits?

First at all, I think of all the job opportunities that you can have are available in a big city  such as London, where you can improve your career and get a well paid job. Where every day is different and you can enjoy your life too with all the social activities that you can do and all the people all around the world that you are able to meet in a big, chaotic and busy city.

On the other hand , it is true that living in a big city such as London has higher cost than living in a  the quiet countryside, where you can enjoy the time with your family and friends without living the frenetic life of the city, keeping in touch with nature without any stress from outside.

In conclusion, I think that there is not a best place to live but this is a personal decision and it depends on your life achievements and your lifestyle. If you want to build a family, I would suggest that you should move to the quiet countryside where you can grow your children family. However if you are a young person who wants to make a career for yourself , I would suggest moving to a big and fast paced city. Then I think the important question that you need to ask from yourself is: Am I looking for a nice and relaxing life in a  the countryside or an exciting and always changing life in the city?


I Mel you have a nice writing style and put together some good sentences.

Everyone will write and correct your piece differently.

So without changing too much around from your original draft,  these are just the few modifications that I would probably make.

Mainly to do with the use of the definite article and indefinite article.


Hope that helps

Kind regards

R


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