IELTS writing 3
In early 20th century, before the First World War, the Model T was produced by Ford and the assembly-line production made cars affordable for the middle class. After 100 years, this commodity has spread worldwide and is causing several problems for citizens by emitting greenhouse gasses and by losing its comfort because roads are full of them and heavy taxes are imposed on them.
On one hand, there are several cities in which the city centre is almost unreachable because of heavy traffic and frequent accidents, thus people who are commuting day by day to their workplace must rely on public transport or must start their day with a one-hour-long stressful driving. Furthermore, when cars are stuck in traffic and they emit greenhouse gasses that are neither harmless for the environment nor for the citizens living in downtown.
On the other hand, the government could tackle the problem of traffic jams; building new roads and developing a reliable public transport system could ease some overused highways and roads. Furthermore, the number of accidents could be decreased by a stricter licence control and with well-adjusted traffic lights to daily commuting.
In conclusion, I can not deny that the number of cars are increasing rapidly around the whole world and in some countries traffic can be horror not just for drivers but also for pedestrians and for means of public transport. As far as I am concerned, the government should introduce tolls on roads or establish and affordable and punctual public transport system.
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IELTS writing 3
In the early 20th century, before the First World War, the Model T was produced by Ford and the assembly-line production made cars affordable for the middle class. After 100 years, this commodity has spread worldwide and is causing several many problems for citizens, by such as emitting greenhouse gasses emissions, traffic congestion and by losing its comfort because roads are full of them and heavy taxes that are imposed on them.On one hand, There are several many cities in which the city centre is almost unreachable because of heavy traffic and frequent accidents, thus people who are commuting day by day to their workplace must rely on public transport or must start their day with an one-hour-long stressful commute driving. Furthermore, when cars are stuck in traffic, and they emit greenhouse gasses that are neither harmless harmful for the environment nor and for the citizens living in urban areas downtown.
On the other hand, The government could tackle address/solve/remedy the problem of traffic jams; by building new roads and developing a reliable public transport system which could ease some overused highways and roads. Furthermore, the number of accidents could be decreased by a stricter licence controls and with well-adjusted traffic lights to for daily commuting. (szórend, inkább ...and with traffic lights properly adjusted for daily commuting.)
In conclusion, I can not deny that the number of cars in use are is increasing rapidly around the whole world and in some countries traffic can be horror not just for drivers, but also for pedestrians and for means of public transport as well. As far as I am concerned In my opinion, the government should introduce tolls on roads or establish and affordable and punctual public transport systems.
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In early 20th century, before the First World War, the Model T was produced by Ford and the assembly-line production made cars affordable for the middle class. After 100 years, this commodity has spread worldwide and is causing several problems for citizens by emitting greenhouse gasses and by losing its comfort because roads are full of them and heavy taxes are imposed on them. On one hand, there are several cities in which the city centre is almost unreachable because of heavy traffic and frequent accidents, thus people who are commuting day by day to their workplace must rely on public transport or must start their day with a one-hour-long stressful driving. Furthermore, when cars are stuck in traffic and they emit greenhouse gasses that are neither harmless for the environment nor for the citizens living in downtown. On the other hand, the government could tackle the problem of traffic jams; building new roads and developing a reliable public transport system could ease some overused highways and roads. Furthermore, the number of accidents could be decreased by a stricter licence control and with well-adjusted traffic lights to daily commuting. In conclusion, I can not deny that the number of cars are increasing rapidly around the whole world and in some countries traffic can be horror not just for drivers but also for pedestrians and for means of public transport. As far as I am concerned, the government should introduce tolls on roads or establish an affordable and punctual public transport system.
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