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Hi,_all!

Hi,_all! I'm a Chinese girl and my job is to work as a jewelry designer I work as a jewelry designer._I usually like English films and English songs;_but my English level is not very high good,_so sometimes I can't understand the sentence sentences._I came here to make friends and learn English._I hope that you will be one of my friends or teachers!

Remember to always put a full stop at the ends of sentences.

"I" is always capitalised. So are the first letters of all proper nouns.

There is never a space before punctuation, and there always is one after.

"Sentence" is singular. In addition, "the sentence" is definite. It should be plural and indefinite here.

Hi ,all !

Hi,all ! I'm a Chinese girl and my job is jewelry designer ,I usually like english films and english songs,but my english level is not very high ,so sometime i can't understand the sentence.I came here to make friends and improve my english ,i hope that you will be one of my friends or teachers ！